Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural by giving a direct topic sentence followed by one or two specific reasons. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. For example, say you enjoy photographing landscapes because they make you feel relaxed and help you remember places. Include linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photographing landscapes helps me capture moods and memories. For instance, I often take photos at sunrise since the light and colours make the scene feel peaceful and memorable.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like "because" and "so" but avoid filler words such as "uh." Also make grammar correct (e.g., "rural areas" plural). Keep it concise—2–3 sentences is enough.

例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because I grew up in the countryside and find the scenery calming. For example, walking by fields and rivers helps me relax and clear my mind after a busy week.

提案: Provide a clear, direct answer and explain why. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect words (e.g., "ruler controller place" is unclear). Say whether you prefer local or foreign views, or that you like both, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "but" or "however" if contrasting preferences.

例: I don't have a strong preference between views at home and abroad because I enjoy different features in each. For instance, I like familiar countryside scenes in my country for their comfort, but I also enjoy dramatic coastal cliffs abroad for their novelty.

× Yes I do. I like picture taking a picture of different view because it's really. Have give me some sense of the feeling so I prefer.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of different views because it gives me a strong feeling, so I prefer it.

The original contains several sentence structure and word order problems. 'picture taking a picture' is redundant and incorrect; use the gerund phrase 'taking pictures'. 'different view' needs plural 'views' to match meaning (singular/plural error). 'because it's really' is incomplete; replace with a clear clause 'because it gives me a strong feeling.' 'Have give me' is ungrammatical—use present simple 'gives me' to describe a general effect. Add 'it' at the end ('I prefer it') to complete the sentence. Suggestions: use clear subject-verb-object order, use gerund 'taking' with plural 'pictures' and ensure verbs agree in present simple (gives).

× I prefer rural area and rather than urban area because I lived in, uh, rural areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas rather than urban areas because I lived in rural areas.

The phrase 'rural area' is inconsistent with the plural 'areas' later; use plural 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' for general preference. This is a singular/plural consistency issue. Also remove the filler commas and 'uh' and keep tense consistent. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally about types of places.

× So uh, when I go there I can feel really relaxed and clear my mind.

✓ So when I go there I feel really relaxed and can clear my mind.

The original mixes modal 'can feel really relaxed and clear my mind' awkwardly. For habitual or general truths, use present simple 'I feel' and 'can clear my mind' or 'I can clear my mind.' Keep parallel structure: 'I feel relaxed and can clear my mind.' Suggestion: use present simple for regular experiences and maintain parallel verbs with proper auxiliaries.

× I don't have any view about between my country and other country.

✓ I don't have a preference between my country and other countries.

The original uses 'view about between' which is ungrammatical; the correct expression is 'preference between.' Also use 'other countries' plural for general comparison. This is a sentence structure issue—reorder and choose correct noun 'preference.' Suggestion: use standard comparative phrase 'have a preference between X and Y.'

× I just like to see the ruler controller place so.

✓ I just like to see rural, countryside places.

The phrase 'ruler controller place' is incorrect—likely mispronounced or wrong word choice. Use adjective 'rural' and noun 'countryside places' or 'countryside' to convey the meaning. This is an incorrect use of words/adjectives. Suggestion: choose accurate vocabulary and simpler structure: 'I like to see rural places' or 'I like visiting the countryside.'