Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорить плавно и связно; убрать запинки и заполнители (uh, umm), сократить повторы и структурировать ответ: дать короткое утверждение, затем одно-два конкретных примера с деталями. Работайте над точной лексикой (например, photos, locations, atmospheric spots), ритмом и интонацией.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different places, especially urban scenes and cozy restaurants. For example, I like capturing the lighting and details of café interiors and the busy streets at dusk because they show atmosphere and character.

提案: Давать прямой ответ и затем объяснение; избежать неформальных и непонятных выражений (например, “Total the trust”, “both of yours”). Сформулируйте выбор ясно, используйте связки (however, but, also) и приведите конкретные причины и примеры.

例: I prefer both urban and rural views. Urban areas offer interesting architecture and lively cafés, while rural areas provide peaceful landscapes and natural light; for instance, I like photographing old city streets and also quiet fields at sunrise.

提案: Ответьте прямо и объясняйте конкретно; исправьте ошибки слов (countries → country, viewers → views, prices → places?) и избегайте обрывистых фраз. Дайте 1–2 чётких причины с примером и используйте связку для структуры (because, for example, also).

例: I prefer views in my own country because of its historical sites and clean countryside air. For example, I enjoy photographing old monuments and quiet rural roads that reflect our culture and atmosphere.

× Yes, I do. I really enjoy taking for uh, photos, uh, of different, uh, locations, different places, uh, for instance, in urban, urban areas and restaurants, umm, atmospheric locations in.

✓ Yes, I do. I really enjoy taking photos of different locations and places, for instance in urban areas, restaurants, and atmospheric spots.

The sentence contains redundant words and awkward word order; adjectives and nouns are misused. Simplify and order the nouns and modifiers correctly: 'taking photos of different locations and places' and list examples using commas. Remove filler words like 'for' before 'photos' and repeat words ('urban, urban'). Suggestion: Practice reducing redundancy and placing adjectives before nouns directly (e.g., 'atmospheric spots').

× Total the trust, I prefer both of yours, umm, and for instance, in urban areas, uh, I really enjoy, enjoyed for instance, atmospheric cafes, umm.

✓ To be honest, I prefer both types, and, for instance, in urban areas I really enjoy atmospheric cafes.

The speaker used incorrect and unclear pronouns/phrases: 'Total the trust' is a misphrasing of 'To be honest'; 'both of yours' incorrectly refers to 'yours' instead of 'both types' or 'both kinds'. Also verb form 'enjoyed' is inconsistent with present preference. Replace pronouns/phrases with clear references. Suggestion: Use 'to be honest' for honesty, 'both types' to refer to two categories, and keep verb tense consistent (present simple 'enjoy').

× Absolutely, I prefer in my own countries viewers, umm, uh, because of historical prices, umm, fresh air in uh, our countryside, uh, and.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer views in my own country because of historical places and the fresh air in our countryside.

Errors include incorrect plural 'countries' (should be singular 'country' when referring to speaker's own nation) and wrong noun 'viewers' instead of 'views'. 'Historical prices' is incorrect; likely 'historical places'. Also article usage: 'the fresh air' is natural. Maintain present simple 'prefer'. Suggestion: Use singular 'country' for own nation, 'views' for sights, and check word choice ('places' not 'prices').