Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and repetitions, use one clear topic sentence and add one or two concise supporting details with linking words. Be more specific about what you enjoy photographing and why to show richer content and vocabulary.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing scenic views. For example, I often take photos of the moon and mountain ranges because their light and textures make me feel peaceful; additionally, I capture clouds and forests to remember the mood of each place.

提案: Start with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors. Avoid repeating words like 'a lot' and 'beautiful'—use varied vocabulary and precise descriptions.

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer quieter, more varied scenery. For instance, I enjoy crisp mountain air and wide open fields that feel refreshing, and the natural colours and textures are more striking than in cities.

提案: Give a clear preference sentence and then support it with specific examples and reasons using linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g. 'prefer views in my own country') and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Pakistan, because it has spectacular mountain ranges like the Himalayas and serene valleys. For example, visiting the northern areas relaxes me thanks to the sweeping landscapes and fresh mountain air.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of beautiful views.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of beautiful views.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses the present participle 'taking' after 'do like'. Keep as is.

× Uh, whenever I go somewhere, I definitely take pictures of beautiful views, especially moon, clouds, mountains, nature that make me feel alive.

✓ Whenever I go somewhere, I definitely take pictures of beautiful views, especially the moon, clouds, mountains, and other aspects of nature that make me feel alive.

Errors: missing definite article before 'moon' and missing conjunctions/list punctuation make the sentence awkward. Type: sentence structure errors and article errors (use of 'the' with unique nouns). Suggestion: add 'the' before 'moon', insert 'and' between items, and add 'other aspects of' for clarity; keep 'that make me feel alive' as a relative clause modifying 'nature'.

× Good. So yeah, I do take pictures.

✓ So yes, I do take pictures.

Not a grammatical error per se, but 'Good. So yeah,' is conversational filler. Replacing with 'So yes,' is more natural and concise in speaking-test responses.

× I prefer rural areas because they have a lot of beautiful scenery, they have a lot of good nature where you feel good, alive and most beautiful views in cooler areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they have a lot of beautiful scenery and natural places where you feel alive; the most beautiful views are often in cooler areas.

Problems: run-on sentence and awkward phrases like 'good nature' and 'most beautiful views in cooler areas' without a verb. Type: third person singular issue flagged because original lacked clear verb in final clause. Correction introduces verb 'are' for 'the most beautiful views are often in cooler areas' and replaces 'good nature' with 'natural places'. Suggestion: break into two clauses, use precise nouns and include verbs for clarity.

× So yeah, it's beautiful.

✓ So yes, it's beautiful.

No grammatical change required other than preferring 'yes' for formality. The sentence correctly uses 'it's' and is acceptable as a short response.

× I live in Pakistan, so yeah, I would prefer use in my own country because it has a lot of good, uh, places, mountains, nature that when you go there you feel so relaxed.

✓ I live in Pakistan, so I would prefer to stay in my own country because it has many beautiful places and mountains where you feel very relaxed when you visit.

Errors: missing infinitive marker 'to' before 'use' and awkward phrasing 'prefer use in my own country'. Also 'a lot of good' is informal and 'nature that when you go there you feel' is ungrammatical. Type: incorrect use of pronouns and infinitive structure (modal/verb structure). Suggestion: replace with 'prefer to stay in my own country', use 'many beautiful places and mountains', and restructure the relative clause to 'where you feel very relaxed when you visit' for clarity.