Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng ngữ pháp và phát âm chưa chính xác, câu khá dài và lặp từ. Bạn nên dùng câu chủ đề ngắn, tránh lặp, chú ý chia động từ và danh từ số nhiều/đơn, và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn. Ví dụ: sử dụng "I like taking pictures of different views because..." rồi nêu lý do và một ví dụ ngắn.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember places I visit. For example, when I travel to a new city I often photograph the skyline and then share the best shots with my friends.

提案: Câu trả lời thể hiện ý thích rõ ràng nhưng có nhiều tiếng ậm ừ, sai ngữ pháp (mạo từ, số nhiều, cấu trúc câu). Nên tránh filler words, dùng linking words ngắn (however, because) và mô tả cụ thể hơn với cấu trúc chuẩn. Sửa lỗi mạo từ và chia số nhiều: "live in an urban area", "a lot of trees, butterflies and bees", và "it makes me feel".

例: Although I live in an urban area, I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and full of nature. For instance, I enjoy seeing rows of trees and colourful butterflies, which makes me feel relaxed.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác ("refreshed" dùng sai), cấu trúc vụng về và lặp. Nên dùng từ chính xác như "refreshing" hoặc "relaxing", câu ngắn gọn: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. Tránh đảo ngữ không tự nhiên ("me and my friend are going"); dùng "my friend and I" và thì phù hợp (present simple or present continuous).

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel more relaxing and familiar. For example, my friends and I often spend sunny afternoons in the local park, enjoying the trees and sipping cold drinks.

× Yes of course I really like taking picture of different view because especially sometime I can share this picture with my friend and it's make me remember about the place when I travel.

✓ Yes, of course. I really like taking pictures of different views because sometimes I can share these pictures with my friends and they make me remember the places when I travel.

You used singular nouns where plurals were needed: 'picture' -> 'pictures', 'view' -> 'views', 'friend' -> 'friends', 'place' -> 'places'. Also 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb) and pronoun agreement: 'it's make' is incorrect; 'they make' matches plural subject. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to more than one item and match verbs/pronouns to plural subjects.

× Yes of course I really like taking picture of different view because especially sometime I can share this picture with my friend and it's make me remember about the place when I travel.

✓ Yes, of course. I really like taking pictures of different views because sometimes I can share these pictures with my friends and they make me remember the places when I travel.

The phrase 'it's make' is incorrect because the third person singular form 'it' requires the verb 'makes' if 'it' were correct. Here the subject should be plural 'they' to match 'pictures', so the correct verb is 'make'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and choose correct pronoun to refer to plural nouns.

× Yes of course I really like taking picture of different view because especially sometime I can share this picture with my friend and it's make me remember about the place when I travel.

✓ Yes, of course. I really like taking pictures of different views because sometimes I can share these pictures with my friends and they make me remember the places when I travel.

The preposition 'of' in 'taking picture of different view' is awkward; English more naturally uses the plural noun directly ('taking pictures of different views'). Also 'remember about' is nonstandard — use 'remember' without 'about' (remember the place). Suggestion: use 'taking pictures of' and 'remember the place'.

× Actually, umm, although I live in urban area, but I like rural area views because it's so peaceful and I can see a lot of tree, a lot of butterfly and bees. Uh, it's make me feel like umm, wow.

✓ Actually, although I live in an urban area, I like rural views because they're so peaceful and I can see a lot of trees, many butterflies and bees. It makes me feel, wow.

Missing articles and plural forms: 'urban area' needs an article 'an urban area'. 'a lot of tree' should be 'a lot of trees'. 'a lot of butterfly' should be 'many butterflies'. Also 'it's make' should be 'it makes' or 'they're/it makes' depending on subject. Suggestion: add appropriate articles and pluralize countable nouns.

× Actually, umm, although I live in urban area, but I like rural area views because it's so peaceful and I can see a lot of tree, a lot of butterfly and bees. Uh, it's make me feel like umm, wow.

✓ Actually, although I live in an urban area, I like rural views because they're so peaceful and I can see a lot of trees, many butterflies and bees. It makes me feel, wow.

You used both 'although' and 'but' together ('although... but'), which is redundant. Use either 'although' with a comma or 'but' without 'although'. Suggestion: remove one conjunction to avoid redundancy.

× Actually, umm, although I live in urban area, but I like rural area views because it's so peaceful and I can see a lot of tree, a lot of butterfly and bees. Uh, it's make me feel like umm, wow.

✓ Actually, although I live in an urban area, I like rural views because they're so peaceful and I can see a lot of trees, many butterflies and bees. It makes me feel, wow.

The phrase 'in urban area' lacks the article 'an'. Also 'rural area views' is awkward; use 'rural views' or 'views in rural areas'. Suggestion: include articles before singular countable nouns and prefer natural noun phrases.

× Yeah, of course. I really definitely, I like, uh, view in my country because it's so refreshed and make me relax and sometime, uh, in the afternoon, me and my friend are going to the park, go to the park and, uh, drinking.

✓ Yeah, of course. I definitely like views in my country because they are so refreshing and help me relax. Sometimes in the afternoon my friends and I go to the park and have a drink.

Multiple plural and phrasing errors: 'view' should be 'views'. 'it's so refreshed' is wrong — use 'they are so refreshing'. 'make me relax' should be 'help me relax'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'me and my friend' should be 'my friend and I' or 'my friends and I'. 'are going to the park, go to the park and, uh, drinking' should be 'go to the park and have a drink' or 'drink'. Suggestion: pluralize nouns, use correct adjective forms, and use proper subject order and verb forms.

× Yeah, of course. I really definitely, I like, uh, view in my country because it's so refreshed and make me relax and sometime, uh, in the afternoon, me and my friend are going to the park, go to the park and, uh, drinking.

✓ Yeah, of course. I definitely like views in my country because they are so refreshing and help me relax. Sometimes in the afternoon my friend and I go to the park and have a drink.

Use 'my friend and I' instead of 'me and my friend' for the subject of the sentence. Also 'it's so refreshed' incorrectly uses 'it' to refer to 'views'; use 'they' for plural. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match number and use 'X and I' for subjects.