Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles, prepositions) and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences). For example, say why you take photos, who you share them with, and give one clear example of a recent photo.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments and I can share them with friends. For example, when I drive along the beach, I often photograph the sea and sunset from the car window. I usually edit a few photos before I post them online so they look better.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give specific reasons with linking words. Remove filler words (umm, like) and correct minor phrasing issues. Mention one concrete example of a rural scene that you like to make your answer more vivid.

例: I prefer rural views because nature feels more peaceful and visually appealing. For example, I enjoy looking at green fields and quiet lakes, which help me relax and feel more meditative. Also, the fresh air and open space make walks in the countryside very refreshing.

提案: Clarify meaning (avoid unclear words like "bill") and use correct tense and vocabulary. Start with a direct statement of preference, then explain why with one or two clear reasons and a brief example. Avoid repetition and filler sounds.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I am used to the scenery at home and it no longer surprises me. For instance, when I travel abroad I enjoy seeing different architecture and city layouts that feel new and exciting. This variety makes sightseeing more interesting for me.

× I really likes to take a lot of photos just for my memory and to share the people and by using that photos.

✓ I really like to take a lot of photos just for my memory and to share with people and by using those photos.

The verb 'likes' is incorrect because the subject 'I' requires the base form 'like' (third person singular rule). Also 'share the people' and 'that photos' are incorrect: use the preposition 'with' for sharing 'with people' and the demonstrative must agree in number: 'those photos' for plural. Suggestion: use 'I really like' and 'share with people' and 'those photos'.

× And for example, like I really likes to driving the beach side, so I took photos from the window of the cars.

✓ And for example, I really like driving by the beach, so I took photos from the window of the car.

Again 'likes' is wrong with subject 'I': use 'like'. 'To driving' mixes infinitive and -ing form; use 'driving' or 'to drive' but here 'I like driving' is natural. 'the beach side' is better as 'by the beach' and 'the cars' should be singular 'the car' when referring to the vehicle in which the speaker was. Suggestion: 'I really like driving by the beach' and 'from the window of the car'.

× I prefer the rural side bill cause just the nature is so beautiful and aesthetic and it give me the feeling of the umm relaxing umm impression and and a feeling of the like meditative.

✓ I prefer the rural side because the nature is so beautiful and aesthetic and it gives me a relaxing, meditative feeling.

Use 'because' rather than 'cause' for formal speech. 'It give' is incorrect: with singular subject 'it' the verb needs third person singular 'gives' (subject-verb agreement). 'A feeling of the like meditative' is ungrammatical; 'a relaxing, meditative feeling' is concise. Also remove filler 'umm' for clarity. Suggestion: 'I prefer the rural side because the nature is beautiful and it gives me a relaxing, meditative feeling.'

× I prefer abuse of a foreign countries 'cause I'm already get used to the bill of my country, so I got I Whenever I see the bill of the street of my country, I get bored.

✓ I prefer the atmosphere of foreign countries because I'm already used to the sights of my country, so whenever I see the streets of my country, I get bored.

This sentence has multiple issues within the allowed list: 'abuse of a foreign countries' appears to be mistaken for 'atmosphere of foreign countries' (vocabulary choice but fixable). 'I'm already get used to' is wrong: use 'I'm already used to' or 'I've already gotten used to' (past participle form). 'the bill of my country' likely meant 'the sights' or 'the view' — corrected to 'sights'. 'I got I Whenever' contains fragments; restructure to 'so whenever I see... I get bored.' Suggestion: use 'I'm already used to' or 'I've already gotten used to' and 'sights/streets' for clarity.

× So the con uh, overseas bill is more.

✓ So the overseas scenery is more appealing.

'The con uh' and 'bill' are unclear and ungrammatical; 'bill' likely intended 'view' or 'scenery'. Article 'the' may be unnecessary before 'overseas scenery' depending on context; 'the overseas scenery is more appealing' is natural. Also 'is more' needs a comparative complement like 'appealing'. Suggestion: use 'overseas scenery' and complete the comparison: 'is more appealing.'