Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more fluent and natural: give a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation words, and add one supporting detail with a linking word. Also correct basic grammar (use present simple and appropriate verbs).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes because different angles can highlight interesting details.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, remove filler phrases, and add a reason using a linking word. Use more precise vocabulary like “urban areas” and “city scenes.”

例: I prefer photographing urban areas because the architecture and street life offer more variety; moreover, I can find contrasting textures and colors in the city.

提案: Organize your answer: start with a clear position, then explain with specific examples and linking words. Reduce repetition and hesitations, use past/present tenses correctly, and give complete sentences.

例: I prefer both, but mostly I photograph views in my own country because I am more familiar with historic sites such as Shahi Qila. However, I also enjoy photographing landscapes abroad; for instance, the deserts in Saudi Arabia provide dramatic light and wide-open spaces that contrast with my local shots.

× Uh, yes I'll I'll like that.

✓ Uh, yes, I like that.

The original uses 'I'll' (I will) incorrectly to express a present preference. Use simple present 'I like' to state current likes. Remove duplicated 'I'll' and add a comma for clarity.

× Click the picture from different views.

✓ I take pictures from different angles.

The original is an imperative fragment that doesn't fit the student's reply. Use a full declarative sentence with appropriate verb and noun: 'take pictures' and 'angles' are more natural. This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× They show you picture in different angles.

✓ They show you pictures from different angles.

Plural noun 'pictures' is needed and 'from different angles' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also include plural 'pictures' to agree with 'angles'.

× Well, I prefer to click the picture in the mostly in the urban area I feel like.

✓ Well, I prefer to take pictures mostly in urban areas, I feel.

Use 'take pictures' instead of 'click the picture' for natural English. 'Mostly in urban areas' expresses frequency and location; remove redundant 'the' and correct plural 'areas'. Use a comma before the tag 'I feel'.

× Well, I prefer both, uh, mostly I lived in my country, so mostly I always travel in mostly urban areas to click a different, uh, photos like, uh, Shahi Kila and the others.

✓ Well, I prefer both. I live in my country, so I usually travel in urban areas to take different photos, for example Shahi Qila and other places.

Use present simple 'I live' (not 'lived') to describe current residence. Replace repeated 'mostly' with 'usually' and 'always' is inappropriate with 'mostly'. Use 'take photos' instead of 'click' and 'different photos' rather than 'a different, photos'. Correct proper noun spelling 'Shahi Qila' and 'other places' for clarity.

× But uh, also love Saudi Arabia in Saudi Arabia of uh, like deserts.

✓ But I also love Saudi Arabia, especially its deserts.

Add subject 'I' and verb 'love' to form a complete sentence. Remove redundant repetition 'Saudi Arabia in Saudi Arabia of'. Use 'especially its deserts' for natural phrasing.

× So to clicking the photo in the.

✓ So I also like taking photos there.

Original is an incomplete fragment with wrong gerund use. Use 'taking photos' with subject and place reference 'there' to complete the sentence and match context.