Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Avoid filler words like “Yeah” and grammatical errors (e.g., plural/singular forms and word order). Aim for 2–3 sentences, using linking words (e.g., because, so) to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it relaxes me and helps me notice details I would otherwise miss. For example, when I photograph a sunset at the lake I focus on the colors and reflections, which always lifts my mood.

提案: Provide a direct answer first, then give specific supporting details. Correct grammar and vocabulary (use plural forms and precise terms). Use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid vague phrases such as “maybe I would like to say.”

例: I prefer urban views because they combine architecture and nature in interesting ways. For example, my city has rivers and nearby hills where you can see both modern buildings and green landscapes, which creates striking photo opportunities.

提案: Answer directly, then give clear reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., because, since) and avoid mistakes like “in my countries” and “feeling of at my home.” Be specific about what you like about home views (familiarity, culture, memories).

例: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with the places and they remind me of home. For instance, seeing local markets and traditional landscapes makes me feel nostalgic and helps me capture authentic scenes.

× Yes I do. Taking picture in different views will make me happy. Yeah. So I take it as a hobby.

✓ Yes, I do. Taking pictures of different views makes me happy. I consider it a hobby.

Errors: 'Taking picture' should be plural 'Taking pictures' because a general activity uses plural noun (singular/plural issue as well). 'in different views' is incorrect preposition; use 'of different views' (incorrect use of prepositions). 'will make me happy' is unnatural for a habitual preference; use present simple 'makes me happy' (present tense issue). 'So I take it as a hobby' is awkward; use 'I consider it a hobby'. Suggestions: use 'Taking pictures of different views makes me happy. I consider it a hobby.' to express habitual action correctly.'},{