Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um, repeated pronouns), and add one specific supporting detail about what you photograph and why. Keep answers under five sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, last year I took many photos of cityscapes and sunsets and posted them on my social media because I like capturing changing light and architecture.

提案: Give a direct clear preference as the topic sentence, then support with one specific reason and a linking word. Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and avoid repetition. Mention concrete examples (e.g., skyscrapers, busy streets) to be specific.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing tall buildings and busy streets. For instance, in the heart of Riyadh I often focus on skyscrapers and reflections on glass facades to capture the city’s energy.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a concrete reason using correct grammar and a linking word. Be specific about what you see abroad (e.g., museums, mountains, parks) and avoid vague phrases.

例: I prefer views in other countries because Saudi Arabia has fewer natural parks and diverse landscapes. For example, when I travel abroad I visit museums, national parks, and coastal areas to photograph mountains, forests, and historic sites.

× I used to take a lot of pictures, uh, last year and I shared with my accounts and social media.

✓ I took a lot of pictures last year and shared them on my social media accounts.

The phrase 'used to' suggests a past habitual action over a longer period and is unnecessary when specifying 'last year.' Use simple past 'took' and 'shared' for a specific past time. Also include the object 'them' for 'shared' and correct the preposition to 'on' for social media accounts (preposition error corrected). Suggestion: Use simple past for specified past times and ensure objects and prepositions are included.

× I usually take a lot of picture in in the heart of city when I can't see the tallest buildings in the heart of Riyadh.

✓ I usually take a lot of pictures in the heart of the city when I can see the tallest buildings in the center of Riyadh.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'a lot of.' The phrase needs the definite article 'the' before 'city.' The original 'when I can't see' contradicts the context; likely 'can see' is intended to describe looking at tall buildings. Also 'in the heart of Riyadh' is fine but 'center of Riyadh' is an alternative; keep consistent articles. Suggestion: Use plural nouns after 'a lot of,' include 'the' for specific places, and ensure verb meaning matches context.

× I usually take a lot of picture in in the heart of city when I can't see the tallest buildings in the heart of Riyadh.

✓ I usually take a lot of pictures in the heart of the city when I can see the tallest buildings in the heart of Riyadh.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'city' when referring to a specific city ('the heart of the city'). Also remove the duplicated word 'in.' Suggestion: Use 'the' for specific, known places and proofread for duplicated words.

× I prefer a fuse in another countries because we don't have a lot of natural places in Saudi Arabia, so when I travel abroad, I see a lot of museums and natural places.

✓ I prefer to focus on other countries because we don't have many natural places in Saudi Arabia, so when I travel abroad, I visit many museums and natural sites.

The phrase 'a fuse in another countries' is incorrect and unclear. 'Another countries' mixes singular 'another' with plural 'countries.' Use 'other countries.' Also 'a lot of' can be used but 'many' is more natural with countable nouns like 'places' and 'museums.' 'See' is acceptable but 'visit' is clearer for museums. Suggestion: Use 'other' with plural nouns, choose 'many' for countable plural quantification, and use precise verbs like 'visit.'

× I used to take a lot of pictures, uh, last year and I shared with my accounts and social media.

✓ I took a lot of pictures last year and shared them on my social media accounts.

The verb 'shared' requires an object and the preposition 'on' to indicate where content was posted: 'shared them on my social media accounts.' Using 'with' is incorrect in this context. Suggestion: Use 'share something with someone' but 'share something on a platform.'