Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Migliora la correttezza grammaticale e la chiarezza: usa il tempo verbale coerente (presente), elimina parole ridondanti e organizza l’idea principale con una frase tematica seguita da dettagli specifici. Usa parole di collegamento semplici per rendere la risposta fluida.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I like contrasting scenes such as the calm seaside and the rugged mountains because each setting captures a different mood. Taking pictures lets me preserve memories and share the atmosphere with others.

提案: Correggi la struttura della frase e la scelta lessicale: rispondi direttamente, poi spiega con ragioni concrete ed evita ripetizioni come “city, urban city”. Usa connettori per collegare le idee e controlla la concordanza e l’articolo con i sostantivi.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer peaceful, open landscapes that contrast with my everyday urban surroundings. For instance, I enjoy wide fields and rolling hills that help me relax and feel closer to nature.

提案: Rendi la risposta più diretta e coerente: esprimi prima la tua preferenza e poi fornisci esempi specifici. Controlla la punteggiatura e la fluidità delle proposizioni subordinate. Usa vocaboli pertinenti per descrivere i panorami.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Italy offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, you can visit the Alps for dramatic mountain scenery and then travel to the seaside for sunny beaches and coastal views.

× I really enjoyed taking pictures of a large variety of views.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of a wide variety of views.

The student used past tense 'enjoyed' but is describing a general preference; present simple 'enjoy' is correct. Also 'wide variety' is a more natural collocation than 'large variety'. Suggest using present simple for habitual actions and common collocations.

× In particular, I like the difference between the seaside and on the contrast, the mountains.

✓ In particular, I like the contrast between the seaside and the mountains.

The phrase 'on the contrast' is incorrect; use the noun 'contrast' with the preposition 'between' to compare two things. Remove the extra article and reorder to 'the contrast between A and B'. Also 'the mountains' is sufficient without 'on the'.

× I think that is amazing how you can take a picture and save the moment of.

✓ I think it is amazing that you can take a picture and capture a moment.

The original sentence has awkward word order and an extraneous preposition 'of'. Use 'it is amazing that' for a comment and 'capture a moment' or 'save a moment' without 'of'. This corrects sentence structure and idiomatic usage.

× I prefer the views in rural areas because they are different from the panorama I usually see every day.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are different from the scenery I usually see every day.

'Prefer the views' is acceptable but 'prefer views' is more natural. 'Panorama' is not wrong but 'scenery' fits common usage when contrasting everyday urban sights. Present simple 'I usually see' is correct; main change is word choice for naturalness.

× That is the city, urban city, because I think that it add you something look at another landscape.

✓ That's the city, the urban environment, and I think it adds something to look at a different landscape.

Multiple issues: 'That is the city, urban city' is repetitive; 'the urban environment' is clearer. 'Add you something' is ungrammatical—use 'adds something' (subject-verb agreement and correct object). 'Look at another landscape' should be 'to look at a different landscape' with the infinitive and adjective 'different'.

× Although I really like trying to go to new places, enjoy different landscapes, I think that my country, which is Italy, has several different panoramas you can enjoy looking at.

✓ Although I really like trying to go to new places and enjoying different landscapes, I think that my country, Italy, has several different panoramas you can enjoy.

Parallel structure needed: 'trying to go' should be paired with 'enjoying' for balance. 'Which is Italy' is unnecessary; 'Italy' in apposition is sufficient. 'You can enjoy looking at' is wordy—'you can enjoy' or 'you can look at' is clearer.

× So I think you can go from the Alps to the seaside.

✓ So I think you can go from the Alps to the seaside.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present simple 'can go' appropriately expresses general possibility. No change needed; included for completeness.