Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more fluently and clearly, avoid repetitions and filler words, and produce a single concise topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement and plural forms) and more precise vocabulary (e.g., "scenery," "sunset" or "skyline").

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate natural beauty. For example, I often take photos of sunsets and city skylines to capture their colors and contrasts, then share the best ones with my friends.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific, coherent reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "so"). Avoid mispronounced or incorrect words and keep sentences concise. Use accurate vocabulary such as "landscapes," "lakes," "crowds," and "city".

例: I prefer rural views because the wide landscapes and lakes make me feel relaxed. For example, being near fields gives me fresh air and a sense of space, whereas cities often feel crowded and noisy.

提案: Make one clear statement about your preference, avoid repetition, and support it with two specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar and natural collocations (e.g., "natural beauty," "famous places," "proud to live").

例: I prefer views in my own country because Bangladesh has remarkable natural beauty and many famous sites. For example, the Sundarbans and scenic hill areas attract me, and I feel proud to show these places to visitors.

× Is yes I, I yes, I enjoy taking picture of different views because it's helped me, uh, capture memorable moment and appreciate umm.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate them.

The original sentence has disfluent word order and redundant words ('Is yes I, I yes'). 'Taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' (singular/plural issue ID 1) and 'capture memorable moment' needs plural 'moments'. 'It's helped me' is incorrect tense and form for a general habit; use simple present 'it helps me' (present tense issue ID 6). Also add 'them' to refer back to the views (pronoun use ID 12). Combine into a clear, grammatically correct sentence: 'Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and appreciate them.'

× For example, I often photograph some sleep and sky skyline to provide their color and eye.

✓ For example, I often photograph the sky and skylines to capture their colors and beauty.

'Some sleep' is unintelligible; likely meant 'sky'. Use 'photograph the sky and skylines' (article/adjective order issues ID 17 and 18). 'To provide their color and eye' is wrong word choice; use 'to capture their colors and beauty' (incorrect use of adjectives or nouns ID 13). 'Colors' should be plural to match 'sky and skylines' (singular/plural issue ID 1).

× Sharing this photo with my friends, uh.

✓ I like sharing these photos with my friends.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a finite verb for the subject (sentence without a verb ID 23). Use a full sentence 'I like sharing these photos with my friends.' Also pluralize 'photo' to 'photos' to match general habit (singular/plural issue ID 1).

× I prefer views in rural areas because the open land ships and gallery hurt.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscapes and greenery are relaxing.

'Land ships' is incorrect; intended noun is 'landscapes' (word choice/spelling leads to singular/plural confusion ID 1). 'Gallery hurt' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'greenery' or 'gently'—here 'greenery are relaxing' fits meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'greenery is' but using 'landscapes and greenery are' plural matches verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement ID 27).

× Mary Lakes feel less stress unlike crowd citizen.

✓ Many lakes make me feel less stressed, unlike crowded cities.

'Mary Lakes' should be 'many lakes' (spelling/word choice). 'Feel less stress' is acceptable but 'make me feel less stressed' is more natural (use adjective 'stressed' rather than noun 'stress'—incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs ID 13). 'Crowd citizen' is wrong; intended contrast is 'crowded cities'.

× For example, working by field or livers give me fresh air and sense of space which which really get in urban.

✓ For example, working in the fields or rivers gives me fresh air and a sense of space, which you really do not get in urban areas.

Multiple issues: 'working by field or livers' should be 'working in the fields or by rivers' (preposition and singular/plural issues ID 11 and 1). The verb 'give' must agree with the singular gerund phrase 'working... gives' if treated as singular, but treating 'working in the fields or by rivers' as a singular activity uses 'gives' (subject-verb agreement ID 27). 'Sense of space' needs an article 'a'. 'Which which' is duplicated; remove duplicate. 'Really get in urban' needs 'you really do not get in urban areas' or 'which you don't get in urban areas' (sentence structure and article use ID 26 and 17).

× I prefer my own country because Bangladesh is a very beautiful country in the sight of nature, nature, beauty they call, you can also call them nature, nature beauty in Bangladesh for there are many places, famous places in here in Bangladesh and we proud of we live in Bangladesh.

✓ I prefer my own country because Bangladesh is a very beautiful country in terms of natural beauty; there are many famous places in Bangladesh, and we are proud to live there.

The original is repetitive and lacks proper grammar and sentence boundaries (sentence structure errors ID 26). Use 'in terms of natural beauty' instead of 'in the sight of nature'. Remove repeated phrases 'nature, nature' and 'nature beauty'. 'There are many famous places in Bangladesh' fixes word order and article use (there be issue ID 3, article errors ID 22). 'We proud of we live in Bangladesh' must be 'we are proud to live there' (pronoun and verb form corrections: incorrect use of pronouns ID 12; third person or copula omission ID 2/6).