Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise: avoid fillers (uh, umm), give a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific details. Use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'natural scenery', 'vistas', 'panoramas') and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially natural scenery. For example, I like capturing coastal vistas at sunrise because the light and colors change rapidly, creating dramatic photos.

提案: Structure your response with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/since/also). Remove hesitations and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'less air pollution', 'unobstructed vistas', 'mountainous terrain').

例: I prefer rural views because they usually have less air pollution and more open spaces, which give unobstructed vistas. For instance, in the countryside I can photograph rolling hills and mountain ridgelines without buildings blocking the view.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then support it with clear reasons and a specific example. Avoid repeating phrases and filler sounds. Use accurate place names and descriptive words (e.g., 'temperate climates', 'crisp air', 'clear visibility').

例: I like views in both my country and abroad, but I prefer landscapes in cooler, temperate climates because the air tends to be clearer and the scenery is more varied. For example, I enjoy photographing alpine valleys in Switzerland and coastal cliffs in the Balkans, where the crisp air enhances distant details.

× Yes, uh, I do like taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity; no grammatical article error but filler words are unnecessary. Ensure concise spoken response. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Uh, I mostly like natural sceneries and, umm, landscapes.

✓ I mostly like natural scenery and landscapes.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) instead of the plural 'sceneries'. Remove filler 'umm'. 'Natural scenery' is the correct collocation. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Uh, I prefer views in rural areas because, uh, they are more clear, they offer less pollution and they offer a better view in my opinion.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are clearer, have less pollution, and in my opinion offer a better view.

Use comparative adjective 'clearer' not 'more clear'. Combine clauses with parallel verbs: 'are clearer', 'have less pollution', 'offer a better view'. Remove filler 'uh' and reorder for natural flow. Grammar problem type ID:26

× You can, you might get a view of, uh, mountainous landscape or there's something like that.

✓ You might get a view of a mountainous landscape or something like that.

Avoid redundant 'You can, you might'; choose one modal verb 'might'. Use the article 'a' with 'mountainous landscape'. Remove 'there's' which is unnecessary. Remove filler 'uh'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Uh, both, but I think, umm, I think, uh, views in countries where the climate is cooler, I think they offer a better view, uh, for example, Frigerland and countries in Western Europe and uh, Central Europe or the Balkans.

✓ Both, but I think views in countries with cooler climates offer a better view, for example Frigerland, Western European countries, Central Europe, or the Balkans.

Avoid repeated 'I think' and filler words. Use plural 'climates' or 'a cooler climate' and the phrase 'countries with cooler climates' is natural. Remove redundant 'they' and simplify list punctuation. 'Western European countries' is clearer than 'countries in Western Europe'. Grammar problem type ID:12