Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear words. Focus on correct verb forms and simple sentence structures (subject + verb + object).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph landscapes when I travel to the countryside because I like capturing special moments and memories. Also, the natural light and scenery make photos feel more meaningful, so I try to take several shots to remember the trip.

提案: Provide a clear preference statement and support it with two specific reasons using linking words (because, therefore, and). Correct vocabulary (serene, fresh air, crowded) and sentence structure will help. Keep answers concise and coherent, up to five sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are peaceful and have fresh air. For instance, the quiet countryside helps me relax and the natural textures and light create beautiful photo opportunities. In contrast, urban areas often feel crowded and noisy, so I usually choose the countryside when I want to take pictures.

提案: Clarify your position directly (no preference or preference) and give a clear reason with a relevant example. Use correct phrases (no preference, recent travels, dramatic scenery) and avoid vague or incorrect words. Structure: topic sentence + 1–2 supporting details with linking words.

例: I don't have a strong preference between views at home and abroad because I enjoy dramatic scenery wherever I go. For example, on recent trips abroad I saw spectacular coastlines, but I also appreciate familiar landscapes at home, so I choose places based on how photogenic they are rather than the country.

× Views yes I enjoy talking with you of different view.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and wrong verb ('talking' instead of 'taking') and singular 'view' instead of plural 'views'. Use correct verb 'taking' for photos and plural 'views'. Suggestion: follow Subject + Verb + Object order and use plural for general countable nouns.

× I usually take photo when I travel up go to the countryside because I like capturing Siri and memory table number.

✓ I usually take photos when I go to the countryside because I like capturing scenery and memories.

Multiple issues: 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos'; 'travel up go to' is redundant and ungrammatical — use 'go to' or 'travel to'; 'capturing Siri and memory table number' appears to be misheard — correct words are 'scenery and memories'. Use base verb 'go' in present tense. Suggestion: simplify to 'I usually take photos when I go to the countryside because I like capturing scenery and memories.'

× Member I originally I went to countryside and talk minutes later photo to remember.

✓ For example, I once went to the countryside and took pictures to remember the trip.

This sentence is ungrammatical and contains incorrect words: 'Member' unclear, repeated 'I originally I', 'talk minutes later' is wrong. Use past tense 'went' and 'took' to describe a past event and add purpose 'to remember the trip'. Suggestion: structure as 'For example, I once went to the countryside and took pictures to remember the trip.'

× Oh, our perfect view is the rural area because I enjoy peaceful, uh serenely and fresh air.

✓ Oh, my preferred views are in rural areas because I enjoy the peace and fresh air.

Pronoun 'our' is incorrect for personal preference; 'serenely' is an adverb but a noun 'peace' or adjective 'serene' is needed; 'fresh air' is fine. Also match plurality: 'views' and 'rural areas'. Suggestion: use 'my preferred views are in rural areas' and 'I enjoy the peace and fresh air.'

× Wake help me relax over and feel and can be interesting for a dry texture and light Nightline Birthday often feel crowded and noisy.

✓ They help me relax and feel refreshed, and I find rural textures and natural light interesting. Cities often feel crowded and noisy.

Original contains nonsense words ('Wake', 'Nightline Birthday') and incorrect structure. Replace with coherent phrases: 'They help me relax and feel refreshed'; 'rural textures and natural light' makes sense; contrast with 'Cities often feel crowded and noisy.' Suggestion: separate ideas into clear sentences and use appropriate nouns/adjectives.

× I usually choices the countryside.

✓ I usually choose the countryside.

'Choices' is a noun but the sentence needs the verb 'choose' in present tense. Subject 'I' requires base form 'choose'. Suggestion: use correct verb form 'I usually choose the countryside.'

× I don't really have a pro sensor because I recently travel outside my country.

✓ I don't really have a preference because I recently traveled outside my country.

'pro sensor' is incorrect; intended word is 'preference'. Tense should be past 'traveled' to match 'recently' describing a completed action. Also 'travel' -> 'traveled'. Suggestion: use 'preference' and past tense 'traveled'.

× Most of my experiences is with dramatic scenery so I tend to a practical view as home.

✓ Most of my experiences are of dramatic scenery, so I tend to prefer views similar to those at home.

'Experiences' is plural and requires 'are' not 'is'. Preposition 'with' should be 'of' or 'in' when describing experiences. 'Tend to a practical view as home' is unclear — likely 'tend to prefer views similar to those at home.' Suggestion: match subject-verb agreement and use correct prepositions and verbs (prefer).