Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and gives reasons, but it is a little long and has grammar issues and awkward phrasing. Reduce redundancy, use a clear topic sentence, and correct grammar (e.g., "they also help me" instead of "but also help me"). Add one specific example to make it more vivid and keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially on weekend trips. For example, I like photographing coastal sunsets and old city streets because they capture the atmosphere of a place. They also help me remember those trips and share highlights with friends.

提案: The response is too brief and unclear: "Auburn" may be a place but does not answer urban vs rural. Provide a direct topic sentence (urban or rural), a brief reason, and one supporting detail or example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I enjoy open landscapes and quiet scenes. For instance, rolling hills and small farms feel more peaceful and photogenic than crowded city streets.

提案: The answer is unclear and contains grammar mistakes and vague phrases (e.g., "I'm not when I go other countries", "I prefer waves"). Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then explain why with a specific reason and example. Use linking words and correct grammar.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more familiar with the culture and landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing the coastal cliffs at home since I know the best viewpoints and times for good light.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views when I go on weekend trips because I enjoy capturing landscapes and cityscapes, but also help me remember the places I visit and share the best moment with friends.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views when I go on weekend trips because I enjoy capturing landscapes and cityscapes, and it also helps me remember the places I visit and share the best moments with friends.

The original sentence lacks a subject for the verbs 'help' and 'share' after 'but also'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use a clear subject ('it') and ensure verb agreement ('helps') and plural 'moments' to match 'places'. Suggestion: insert 'and it also helps' and change 'share the best moment' to 'share the best moments'. Examiner: Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries? Student: I prefer views in my country because I'm not when I go other countries, so I prefer waves in my country.

× I prefer views in Auburn.

✓ I prefer views in Auburn.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no change. It is a complete sentence with correct subject-verb agreement and meaning. (No error from the provided list.)

× I prefer views in my country because I'm not when I go other countries, so I prefer waves in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I don't feel comfortable when I go to other countries, so I prefer views in my country.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and has several problems: missing verb/object after 'I'm not', incorrect preposition use ('go other countries' should be 'go to other countries'), and an incorrect word 'waves' probably intended as 'views'. These are sentence structure (ID 26) and preposition errors (ID 11). Corrections: expand 'I'm not' to 'I don't feel comfortable', add the preposition 'to' after 'go', and replace 'waves' with 'views'. Ensure consistency and clarity by repeating 'views in my country' or rephrasing to avoid repetition.