Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct frequent errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct grammar (talking → taking; it's more important for me → it’s important to me), and give one specific reason with a short example. Keep the answer within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding a detail (for example, "because" or "so").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me capture special moments. For example, when I visit the seaside I take pictures of the sunset to remember how peaceful it felt.

提案: Clarify and choose one preference, correct vocabulary (whales → wells? unclear; natural urban areas → rural areas), and use coherent linking. Give one clear reason and a brief example. Avoid repeating words and finish the sentence. Use 2–3 sentences max.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy natural scenery like forests and mountains. For example, visiting a mountain trail relaxes me and lets me take peaceful landscape photos.

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct response and a clear reason. Remove repetition and correct tenses (prefer will not own my country → I prefer views in other countries; improve → improves). Provide a brief, specific example of how traveling abroad helps language skills. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad helps me improve my English and meet new people. For instance, when I visited the UK I practiced speaking with locals while admiring historic cityscapes.

× Yes, I like talking pictures of different views because it's more important for me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it is important to me.

The verb 'take' should be used with the -ing form 'taking' after 'like' when describing a hobby. 'Talking pictures' is incorrect; 'taking pictures' is the correct collocation. Also 'it's more important for me' is awkward and unneeded comparative 'more'; use 'it is important to me.' Suggestion: use common collocations (take pictures) and avoid unnecessary comparatives.

× I like taking pictures of different views, umm, because it's make me feel uh, good and different.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they make me feel good and different.

The subject referring to 'taking pictures' or 'they' requires a verb form that agrees in number. 'It’s make' is ungrammatical: 'it is' contracts to 'it's' and requires a singular verb, but 'make' should be 'makes' if the subject were 'it'. Better to use plural 'they make' referring to 'pictures' or use 'taking pictures makes me feel...'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and choose a clear subject (e.g., 'taking pictures makes me feel...').

× We use uh.

✓ We use them often.

The original fragment 'We use uh.' is incomplete and unclear. It lacks an object and does not fit the context. If the student meant they use cameras or photographs, a complete sentence like 'We use them often' or 'We use cameras to take them' is needed. Suggestion: always include the object of the verb and complete the thought.

× I prefer whales or urban areas because that's a new natural like forest, wooden mountains.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they have natural features like forests and wooded mountains.

The student wrote 'whales or urban areas' which seems to be a mispronunciation; likely intended 'rural' not 'whales'. 'Prefer ... or urban areas' is incorrect choice of preposition/word. 'That's a new natural like forest, wooden mountains' has incorrect prepositions and noun modifiers: use 'they have natural features like forests and wooded mountains.' Suggestion: use correct terms ('rural'), plural nouns for lists ('forests, wooded mountains') and correct prepositions/phrasing ('features like').

× I like visit mountains because when I visit natural urban areas that make me feel good and.

✓ I like visiting mountains because visiting natural rural areas makes me feel good.

After 'like' use the gerund 'visiting' not the base form 'visit'. Also 'natural urban areas' contradicts 'mountains' and likely 'rural' was intended. 'That make' has incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'makes' for singular activity or 'make' with plural subject. The sentence was also incomplete; the corrected sentence completes the thought. Suggestion: use gerunds after 'like', ensure consistent vocabulary (rural vs urban), and correct subject-verb agreement.

× That's a good good question. I prefer will not own my country.

✓ That's a good question. I would not prefer to stay in my own country.

'I prefer will not own my country' mixes modal/future structure and incorrect pronouns. 'Will not' is not used with 'prefer' in this way, and 'own' is wrong for 'stay in'. Also 'own' vs 'own my country' is ungrammatical. Suggested correction uses a polite modal 'would not prefer to stay in my own country.' Suggestion: use correct verbs (stay, live, visit) and proper modal constructions ('would prefer not to...').

× I don't like it. I prefer whereas other countries because it improve my communication skills and improve my English.

✓ I don't like it. I prefer other countries because they improve my communication skills and my English.

'I prefer whereas other countries' misuses 'whereas' and has pronoun errors. Use 'I prefer other countries' and refer to them with plural pronoun 'they'. 'Improve' needs third person plural agreement 'improve' is fine with 'they', but 'it improve' is incorrect. Also repeat 'my' before 'English' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid 'whereas' here, use 'other countries', and ensure pronoun-verb agreement and parallel structure.

× If that's English language country I can communicate with other people and give.

✓ If it is an English-speaking country, I can communicate with other people and give my opinions.

The conditional clause needs subject-verb agreement and proper adjective form: 'English-speaking country' is correct. 'That's' is informal and ungrammatical here; use 'if it is'. The clause was incomplete ('and give'). Complete the thought with 'give my opinions' or 'give information'. Suggestion: use hyphenated compound modifiers ('English-speaking'), complete the verb phrase, and ensure conditional clause structure ('If it is...').