Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix grammatical errors (e.g., double words, tense, articles). Use linking words like "for example" or "also" when adding details.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes. For example, I often take pictures of nature and animals — especially cats — because I like to capture small, everyday moments. I try to take at least one photo a day to practise my composition and keep a visual diary.

提案: Provide a clear preference in the topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "urban" vs "rural", "architecture", "landscapes") and correct sentence structure. Remove unclear phrases like "adding pictures of roller."

例: I prefer rural views because they tend to be more colorful and varied. For instance, countryside landscapes offer rich colours and peaceful compositions, whereas urban scenes are interesting for their architecture and textures, but can be more cluttered.

提案: Give a direct answer first and then provide specific reasons and an example. Avoid fillers like "uh" and repetition. Use comparative language correctly (e.g., "more diverse landscapes") and a linking word such as "because" or "for example."

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer landscapes I haven't seen before. For example, when I visited Bali I found more diverse, colourful nature than at home, which inspired me to take many photos and try new techniques.

× If I I always take a picture of a cat.

✓ If I see a cat, I always take a picture of it.

The sentence repeats 'I' and misuses conditional structure. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and subject-verb sequence issue. Use a proper conditional clause 'If I see...' and place the adverb 'always' after the verb phrase. Replace the repeated subject and add the pronoun 'it' to refer to the cat. Suggestion: Form an if-clause with the present simple for habitual conditions: 'If I see... I always...'. Use a pronoun to avoid repetition.

× If I saw a cute cat, I like to capture these moments.

✓ If I see a cute cat, I like to capture the moment.

Using 'saw' creates a past-time condition, but the speaker describes a habitual preference. This is a tense error (ID 5). Use present simple 'see' in real conditional sentences about habits. Also use singular 'the moment' or plural consistently; 'the moment' fits a single encounter. Suggestion: Use present simple in the if-clause for habitual or general truths: 'If I see..., I like...'. Keep noun number consistent.

× I like at least take a picture a day.

✓ I like to take at least one picture a day.

The sentence has incorrect verb complement structure and article/quantifier omission. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and article/quantifier issue (ID 14/22). Use 'like to take' and include the quantifier 'one' and place 'at least' before the number. Suggestion: Use the infinitive after 'like' and include a determiner for 'picture': 'I like to take at least one picture a day.'.

× There will not be a day without me taking a picture.

✓ There will not be a day when I don't take a picture.

The original phrasing is awkward and uses a gerund with a possessive pronoun in a nonstandard way. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use a relative clause 'when I don't...' with the negative auxiliary 'don't' to express habitual negation. Suggestion: Prefer 'There will not be a day when I don't take a picture' for natural English.

× I'd like adding pictures of roller.

✓ I'd like to add pictures of roller coasters.

After 'I'd like' the infinitive form 'to add' is required, not the gerund 'adding' (ID 8). Also 'roller' is incomplete; the intended noun is 'roller coasters' (plural) or another specific item. Suggestion: Use 'I'd like to add...' and the correct noun: 'I'd like to add pictures of roller coasters.'.

× It is more but I would not say I hate urban areas.

✓ I prefer rural ones, but I would not say I hate urban areas.

'It is more' is unclear and ungrammatical; this is a sentence structure/word choice error (ID 26). Replace with a clear comparative statement 'I prefer rural ones'. Keep contrast with 'but' and maintain subject consistency. Suggestion: Use explicit comparative phrasing: 'I prefer rural areas, but I don't hate urban areas.'.

× There is a beauty and buildings and factories are that is so fun to capture and enjoying to look at.

✓ There is beauty in the city, and buildings and factories are fun to capture and enjoyable to look at.

This sentence contains multiple errors: awkward 'there is a beauty' (article issue, ID 22), incorrect clause 'are that is' (sentence structure, ID 26), and incorrect gerund 'enjoying' where an adjective 'enjoyable' is needed (ID 13/10). Correct by removing the unnecessary article, fixing clause structure, and using 'enjoyable'. Suggestion: Break into two clear parts: 'There is beauty in the city, and buildings and factories are fun to capture and enjoyable to look at.'.

× Uh but rural area is much more colorful.

✓ But rural areas are much more colorful.

'Rural area' should be plural when speaking generally about rural places; subject-verb agreement requires 'areas are' (ID 1 and 27). Use plural to indicate a general preference. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general statements: 'Rural areas are much more colorful.'.

× I prefer views in other countries more, uh, specifically because I have not seen that place before and it's full of nature.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, specifically because I have not seen those places before and they are full of nature.

The sentence mixes singular 'that place' with plural 'countries'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns/articles (ID 12 and 22) and slight present perfect usage is fine. Change to 'those places' and 'they' to match plural 'countries'. Suggestion: Keep number agreement between noun and pronoun: 'other countries' -> 'those places' and 'they are'.

× I'm not saying our country doesn't have nature, but other countries and the places I went have more nature than our country.

✓ I'm not saying our country doesn't have nature, but the other countries I've visited have more natural scenery than ours.

Unclear phrasing 'the places I went' and inconsistent comparison object 'our country' vs 'ours' (ID 19 and 22). Use present perfect 'I've visited' for past experience relevant now, and compare 'more natural scenery' with 'ours'. Suggestion: Use 'the other countries I've visited' and compare to 'ours' for clarity: '...have more natural scenery than ours.'.

× And I like to look at new things that are colorful.

✓ I also like looking at new, colorful things.

Original is understandable but slightly wordy and uses infinitive where gerund is more natural after 'like' for general preference (ID 8). Shorten and reorder adjectives correctly (ID 18). Suggestion: Use gerund after 'like' and place adjectives in natural order: 'I also like looking at new, colorful things.'.