Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答观点明确，但存在语法错误、冗余与表达不自然的问题。改进建议： 1) 修正语法与动词搭配（例如不要说“I like to taking”），并用更自然的短句。2) 限制长度在最多五句内，避免重复（已说喜欢风景就不必重复“because I like the scenery”）。3) 提供更具体细节并用连接词使语流顺畅，例如说明拍照的目的、常去的地点或喜欢的时间。4) 使用更丰富但贴切的词汇，如“landscape, wildlife, stroll, capture”来替代泛词。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love capturing landscapes and wildlife. For example, I often stroll through the local park at golden hour to photograph flowers and birds. I find these shots calming and they help me remember places I visit.

提案: 存在多处词汇和语法错误（如“wheels”和结构混乱），表达不连贯且重复。改进建议： 1) 使用正确词汇（urban areas而非 wheels），并给出直接立场句。2) 用连接词（because, for example, however）组织支持细节，避免重复“I think”。3) 提供具体比较点（建筑、夜景、交通便利等）并给出个人感受或原因。4) 保持句子简洁，控制在五句内。

例: I prefer urban views because modern architecture and bright city lights appeal to me. For example, I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and illuminated streets at night. Also, city infrastructure makes it easier to move around and find interesting spots.

提案: 表达含糊且有语法错误和用词不当（如“in over country”，“is is”）。改进建议： 1) 明确回答并避免模糊短语，直接说“my country”或“other countries”。2) 修正动词与单复数一致性，使用具体描述（which mountains, which rivers, or particular scenery）。3) 提供原因并用连接词，如“because, for example”。4) 用更自然的短语替换“make me happy in the occasion”，例如“bring me joy”或“make me feel relaxed”。

例: I prefer the views in my own country because our landscapes are very diverse and beautiful. For example, we have scenic mountains and winding rivers that I often visit. These places bring me a lot of joy and help me relax.

× For example, I like to taking a walk in the park around me to see the plants and flowers and animals.

✓ For example, I like taking a walk in the park near my home to see the plants, flowers, and animals.

原句中使用了不正确的动词形式组合“like to taking”。动词“like”后面可以接不定式（to do）或动名词（doing），但不能混用‘to’和动名词ing。建议改为“like taking”或“like to take”。另外，将“the park around me”改为更自然的“the park near my home”，并使用逗号分隔并列名词。

× I think I prefer wheels in urban areas because I think the modern architecture and the bright lights in urban areas is more appealing me and I think a for example the infrastructure in urban area is more convenient.

✓ I think I prefer views in urban areas because the modern architecture and the bright lights in cities are more appealing to me, and, for example, the infrastructure in urban areas is more convenient.

原句中“wheels”应为“views”，属于词汇错误，但按题单需处理量词/用词问题，归为“Incorrect use of quantifiers”可解释为不正确的用词。句中主语“the modern architecture and the bright lights”为复数，谓语应使用复数动词“are”，而原句使用单数“is”。此外，“appealing me”应为“appealing to me”。句子冗长且有多余词，如“a for example”，应删去并重组为更清晰的并列结构。

× I think I prefer views in over country because I think the views in our country is is more splendid.

✓ I prefer views in our country because I think the views in our country are more splendid.

原句中“in over country”是拼写/用词错误，应为“in our country”。此外主语“the views”为复数，谓语应使用复数形式“are”，原句错误地使用了“is is”（双重错误和时态/一致性错误）。建议确保主谓一致并去掉重复单词。

× For example, mountains, rivers and any other sceneries make me happy in the occasion.

✓ For example, mountains, rivers, and other scenery make me happy on such occasions.

原句“any other sceneries”用法不自然，其中“scenery”通常作不可数名词而不用复数“sceneries”。短语“in the occasion”也不符合英语习惯，应改为“on such occasions”或“on those occasions”。建议使用不可数名词并调整介词搭配以符合语境。