Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations (uh, um), and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct verb forms and reduce repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love being outdoors and it helps me relax. For example, photographing coastal cliffs and forests motivates me and broadens my perspective by showing different natural patterns and colors.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), and provide specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like 'exact atmosphere'.

例: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and offer unique natural features to photograph. For instance, quiet country lanes and rolling fields inspire me more than busy city streets, and I find them more relaxing to explore with a camera.

提案: Answer directly, avoid contradictory phrases ('I enjoyed... but I prefer'), and give a clear reason with a specific example. Use fluent linking words and finish your example coherently.

例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling exposes me to different cultures and landscapes. For example, visiting historic European cities allowed me to photograph medieval architecture and compare it with coastal scenery back home, which expanded my photographic interests.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views like because I love being outdoors and uh umm also it's keep me motivated and broaden my horizons in nature of our views. Also it helps me to help me to see new perspectives so.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love being outdoors. It keeps me motivated and broadens my horizons. It also helps me see new perspectives.

Errors involve incorrect verb forms: 'it's keep me motivated' uses auxiliary 'it's' plus base verb instead of 'it keeps' (third person singular present), and 'broaden my horizons' needs third person singular 'broadens' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also 'helps me to help me to see' is redundant; use 'helps me see'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual actions and ensure subject-verb agreement (it + verb+s). Remove redundant phrases and filler words.

× I prefer in views in rural areas because it have an exact atmosphere and also like also taking pictures in rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they have a special atmosphere, and I also like taking pictures there.

Problems: unnecessary preposition 'in' after 'prefer' ('prefer views' or 'prefer taking photos in'), incorrect pronoun/number 'it have' should be plural 'they have' to agree with 'views', and awkward phrase 'an exact atmosphere' — 'a special atmosphere' is more natural. Suggestions: omit extra 'in', match subject and verb number, and choose appropriate adjectives. Use 'there' to refer to rural areas.

× It's really it's impressed me to taking pictures more and also it keeps me motivated.

✓ It really impressed me to take more pictures, and it keeps me motivated.

'It's impressed me' mixes contraction 'it's' (it is) with past participle incorrectly. Use simple past 'it impressed me' or present perfect 'it has impressed me'. Also 'to taking pictures' should be the infinitive 'to take'. Maintain consistent tense and correct verb forms.

× Umm I enjoyed the scenery in my own country because but I prefer views from other countries because because it's traveling lets me experience different cultures and the broaden my horizons like experience different landscapes.

✓ I enjoy the scenery in my own country, but I prefer views from other countries because traveling lets me experience different cultures and broadens my horizons by exposing me to different landscapes.

Tense inconsistency: 'I enjoyed' (past) should be 'I enjoy' (present) to match 'I prefer' and general statements. 'it's traveling lets' is incorrect; use 'traveling lets' or 'travel lets'. 'the broaden my horizons' has extra article 'the' and wrong verb form; use 'broadens my horizons'. Suggestions: keep present tense for general preferences, remove duplicate words, and ensure correct verb forms and articles.

× For example, I love visiting historical cities so to gain new.

✓ For example, I love visiting historical cities to gain new experiences.

Sentence fragment: 'to gain new' is incomplete and lacks an object. Add a noun such as 'experiences' to complete the purpose clause. Also remove unnecessary filler 'so'. Suggestions: complete infinitive phrases with appropriate noun objects and avoid trailing fragments.