Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and clear: answer directly with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid short fragmented phrases. Also correct word choices (e.g., “scenes” or “landscapes” instead of “which is natural and fast”).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me notice details in my surroundings. For example, I often take landscape shots of parks and cityscapes, as I like capturing natural light and unique compositions.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use correct vocabulary ("views" or "scenes" instead of "weaves"), and finish your sentences fully.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the variety of architecture and lively street scenes. For instance, cityscapes offer interesting contrasts between old and new buildings, and there are always bustling cafés and parks to photograph.

提案: State your preference clearly and give concrete reasons with linking words. Correct pronoun use ("my" country) and avoid repetition. Describe specific feelings or examples that explain why you prefer home-country views.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and emotionally meaningful to me. For example, photographing local landscapes and traditional neighborhoods reminds me of childhood memories and makes me feel comfortable and connected.

× Yes, I like. Which is natural and fast. And interesting art.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because it is natural, fast, and interesting as an art form.

The original contains sentence fragments and unclear references ('Which' has no clear antecedent). This is a sentence structure error: combine fragments into a complete sentence and clarify the subject. Use a gerund phrase 'taking pictures' as the object of 'like' and link qualities with commas and 'and'. Suggestion: Replace fragments with a single complete sentence that names the activity and describes it using adjectives in a list.'

× I prefer weaves in urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas.

The word 'weaves' is a misspelling and causes meaning error; 'views' is the correct noun. This is a subject-word choice issue affecting agreement and meaning. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'views' to match the question context.'

× So I like it because urban areas are. Comfortable and.

✓ So I like them because urban areas are comfortable and convenient.

The original has sentence fragments and unclear pronoun reference ('it' and trailing 'and.'). This is a sentence structure error. Use a plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'views', complete the adjective list, and provide a coherent reason. Suggestion: Finish the thought and avoid fragments.'

× I prefer weaves in your own country because I love it and I've I feel, I feel warmly.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I love it and I feel warm and comfortable there.

Multiple errors: wrong word 'weaves' and incorrect pronoun 'your' when speaking about own preference; repeated and ungrammatical phrases 'I've I feel'. This is primarily subject-verb/pronoun agreement and sentence structure. Use 'views', correct possessive 'my', simplify to 'I feel warm and comfortable', and place 'there' to indicate location. Suggestion: Keep sentences simple and avoid repetition.'

× I prefer weaves in your own country because I love it and I've I feel, I feel warmly. And comfortable.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I love it and I feel warm and comfortable there.

The original uses the wrong pronoun 'your' instead of 'my' when stating a personal preference, and uses 'warmly' incorrectly (adverb instead of adjective). This is an incorrect use of pronouns and adjective/adverb choice. Suggestion: Use 'my' for own possession and 'warm' (adjective) to describe how you feel; place 'there' to indicate location.'