Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds ("uh"), correct grammar ("photos", "to keep my memories"), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep under five sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos when I travel abroad because they help me remember unique places; for example, I often photograph local markets and historic buildings to share with my family.

提案: Answer directly and clearly (say "I prefer rural areas"). Use correct vocabulary ("prefer", "rural areas", not "refer"), give a specific reason, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases like "sense of come."

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more scenic; for example, rolling hills and small fishing villages make me feel relaxed and refreshed when I look at the photos later.

提案: Respond directly ("I prefer views in my country") and fix grammar and repetition (remove duplicate words). Provide one clear specific reason and use a linking word like "because" or "because of." Keep sentences complete and under five. Avoid trailing off mid-sentence.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers a lot of beautiful natural scenery; for instance, peaceful lakes and forests make me feel comfortable and at ease when I visit or look at photos.

× I'm keen on taking photo when I travel abroad to keep my memory and uh, I really enjoy them.

✓ I'm keen on taking photos when I travel abroad to keep my memories, and I really enjoy it.

The phrase 'keen on' requires the verb in -ing form (taking) which is correct, but 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match general activity; 'memory' should be plural 'memories' when referring to multiple recollections; and the pronoun 'them' is unclear—use 'it' to refer to the activity of taking photos or 'them' could refer to 'photos' if sentence is rephrased. Also add a comma and 'and' to connect clauses for clarity.

× I refer views in rural areas because I like baseball places and apart from that when I look at it again it's give me sense of come.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I like open spaces, and when I look at them again they give me a sense of calm.

Use 'prefer' instead of 'refer' (vocabulary error but treated via pronoun/word choice). 'Views' is plural so use pronoun 'them' not 'it'. 'It's give' is incorrect: subject 'they' requires verb 'give'. 'sense of come' is incorrect; likely intended 'sense of calm'. Also 'baseball places' is unclear; 'open spaces' fits rural preference. Ensure subject-pronoun agreement and correct verb forms.

× I yes, I refer views in my country because my country has many natural beautiful natural scenery and moreover it's really peaceful and it's give me scene I'm comfortable when I.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in my country because my country has many beautiful natural sceneries; moreover, it is really peaceful and it gives me a sense of comfort.

Use 'prefer' not 'refer'. 'Beautiful natural scenery' should be reordered to 'beautiful natural scenery' or 'beautiful natural sceneries' (scenery is usually uncountable; 'scenery' singular is better: 'has much beautiful natural scenery'). 'It's give' is incorrect for third person singular—use 'it gives'. The fragment 'I'm comfortable when I.' is incomplete; revise to 'it gives me a sense of comfort.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and complete sentence structure.