Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời nên rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và mạch lạc hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, tránh tiếng ồ ồ (fillers) và hoàn thiện các cụm từ dang dở. Sử dụng liên từ để nối các ý và đưa ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: bầu trời xanh, hoa, cảnh hoàng hôn). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, tránh lặp từ ‘color’ nhiều lần.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me remember special moments. For example, I like capturing blue skies and colorful flowers during sunrise because the light makes the scene vivid. I also take photos to share those memories with friends.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tránh lặp ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'like' -> 'lights'). Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ. Dùng liên từ như 'however' hoặc 'because' đúng vị trí để mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the vibrant city lights at night. For instance, the sparkling lights in downtown make the streets feel lively and exciting, especially when I walk around with friends.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần chính xác ngữ pháp và tránh nói lan man. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, tránh cụm từ thừa ('you know', 'uh yeah'), sửa lỗi danh từ (Vietnamese -> Vietnam / Vietnamese landscapes). Nên nêu 2 ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ vùng núi Sapa, bãi biển Đà Nẵng) và lý do vì sao bạn tự hào.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam offers diverse landscapes. For example, I love the terraced mountains in Sapa and the beaches in Da Nang, which both show the natural beauty and cultural charm of Vietnam.

× Yes, of course taking picture of different views will help me a lot when I want to mention something differently.

✓ Yes, of course, taking pictures of different views will help me a lot when I want to describe things differently.

The sentence needed plural 'pictures' (singular/plural) and 'describe' is a more appropriate verb than 'mention' for talking about visual details. Also a comma after 'of course' improves clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and choose verbs that match meaning.

× And I think it's a good idea because uh, I will see the color of different views.

✓ And I think it's a good idea because I can see the colors of different views.

Use plural 'colors' when referring to multiple views that have more than one color. Also 'can' is more natural for the ability to see rather than future 'will' in this context.

× I can see to the blue sky, beautiful flowers or even the color of.

✓ I can see the blue sky, beautiful flowers, or even their colors.

Remove incorrect preposition 'to' after 'see'. The phrase 'the color of' was incomplete; use 'their colors' to refer back to the views. Also add commas to separate items.

× Personally I prefer both.

✓ Personally, I prefer both.

Add a comma after 'Personally' for natural spoken punctuation. Grammatically this sentence is acceptable otherwise.

× However I do like urban areas most because I love the colorful lights when they are sparkling and I think these like are very lively to me.

✓ However, I do like urban areas most because I love the colorful lights when they sparkle, and I think these lights feel very lively to me.

'They are sparkling' is acceptable but 'when they sparkle' is more natural. 'These like' is a typo; should be 'these lights'. Also 'lively to me' is better as 'feel very lively to me'. Add comma after 'However'.

× I think they are so spectacular so I love them so.

✓ I think they are so spectacular, so I really love them.

Avoid repeating 'so' unnecessarily. Add a comma before 'so' and simplify to 'I really love them' for natural emphasis.

× Of course, I really like the views in my country because, you know, as a Vietnamese person, I'm proud to say that Vietnamese has all the beautiful landscape in the world, especially the mountainous areas and uh yeah, the mountainous area and beautiful beaches in some big city.

✓ Of course, I really like the views in my country because, you know, as a Vietnamese person, I'm proud to say that Vietnam has some of the most beautiful landscapes in the world, especially the mountains and the beautiful beaches near some big cities.

Use the country name 'Vietnam' not the adjective 'Vietnamese' as the subject. 'Has all the beautiful landscape in the world' is an exaggeration and ungrammatical; change to 'has some of the most beautiful landscapes'. Make 'mountains' plural and 'cities' plural to match meaning. Clarify 'near some big cities' instead of 'in some big city'.