Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer clearer and more natural: give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid redundancy, and add a specific detail or example. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me see familiar places from a fresh perspective. For example, I recently photographed a seaside cliff at sunrise, which revealed colors and shapes I had never noticed before.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then explain why with a specific reason and an example. Remove redundant phrases (e.g., "since" and "so" together) and correct verb agreement. Use a linking word like "because" or "so" for coherence.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer tranquility and scenery that I don’t see in the city. For instance, I love photographing open fields and traditional villages, which contrast strongly with the busy streets where I grew up.

提案: Answer directly and avoid rhetorical questions that sound informal. Explain why foreign views are appealing with a concrete example and correct informal phrases like "kinda." Use a linking word such as "because" or "which" to connect ideas and keep to 1–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often show landscapes and cultures I’m unfamiliar with, which makes traveling more exciting. For example, seeing traditional markets in Southeast Asia gave me new photographic subjects and stories to share.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because it will create a new point of views on every each of the new furthest that I took and it will create a new stories.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because they create a new point of view for each place I visit and they tell new stories.

Errors: incorrect plural/singular forms ('point of views' -> 'point of view', 'a new stories' -> 'new stories'); awkward phrase 'every each of the new furthest that I took' and tense/word choice. Type matched: Verb in the present participle form (10) partly applies because 'taking' is fine but surrounding noun forms are wrong; however these are covered by plural/article issues (1 and 22) and sentence structure (26). Correction simplifies structure and ensures subject-verb agreement ('they create') and correct noun forms. Suggestion: replace imprecise phrases with 'each place I visit', use correct singular/plural for 'point of view', and match verbs to plural subjects.

× Since I was born and raised in urban areas, so I think I prefer the rural areas because it give us a different kind of views from what we saw every day.

✓ Since I was born and raised in an urban area, I think I prefer rural areas because they give us different views from what we see every day.

Errors: redundant conjunction 'Since... so' (sentence structure), incorrect article use ('urban areas' -> 'an urban area' or 'urban areas' with consistent reference), subject-verb agreement ('it give' -> 'they give'), tense inconsistency ('saw' -> 'see'), and plural/article issues ('a different kind of views' -> 'different views'). I corrected to ensure subject and verb agree ('they give') and consistent present tense for general statements. Suggestion: avoid redundant connectors, keep tense consistent for habitual facts, and match singular/plural and articles properly.

× I actually prefer views in other countries since it's not common. Do you see them every day? So it's kinda gives you a new experience and stories.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries since they are less common; you do not see them every day, so they give you new experiences and stories.

Errors: sentence fragments and conversational questions that break structure ('Do you see them every day?' followed by 'So it's kinda gives' is informal and ungrammatical), incorrect pronoun/verb agreement ('it's kinda gives' should be 'they give' or 'it kind of gives' but plural 'views' requires 'they give'), and informal 'kinda'. I changed to full sentences, corrected agreement ('they are', 'they give'), and used formal phrasing ('less common', 'new experiences'). Suggestion: avoid filler words like 'kinda' in formal responses, ensure pronoun number matches the noun, and combine short fragments into coherent sentences.