Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, correct grammatical mistakes, avoid redundancy (e.g., "natural nature"), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example and a linking phrase to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing mountain landscapes and coastal sunsets because the light and colors change so dramatically. For example, last summer I captured a sunset over a cliff with my phone and later shared it on Instagram, where my friends commented on the colors.

提案: Answer directly and reduce filler words. Use a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific reasons with linking words. Replace repeated phrases ("over there") with varied vocabulary and correct small grammar errors.

例: I prefer rural areas because they are calmer and more peaceful than cities. For instance, I love watching quiet village sunsets and the star-filled nights, which help me relax and take better photos.

提案: Be concise and decisive. Start with a clear direct answer, then justify it with specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague phrases like "it's quite tricky" and grammar errors ("wherever it's find interesting"). Use linking words (however, because) to connect ideas.

例: I don't have a strong preference because every country has its own unique beauty. However, I choose destinations based on the scenery: for mountains I might travel abroad, but for familiar coastal views I prefer my own country because I know the best spots.

× Yeah, to be honest I am very photogenic person.

✓ Yeah, to be honest I am a very photogenic person.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before the noun phrase 'very photogenic person'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Add 'a' to make the sentence grammatically correct. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns: 'I am a very photogenic person.'

× I love to taking pictures of a really beautiful views like natural nature, natural sceneries, mountains and whatever I find interesting.

✓ I love taking pictures of really beautiful views like natural scenery, mountains and whatever I find interesting.

Incorrect combination of 'to' with the -ing form: 'love to taking' mixes the infinitive marker 'to' with a gerund. Use either 'love to take' or 'love taking'. Also 'a really beautiful views' has article-number mismatch; remove 'a' and pluralize 'scenery' is usually uncountable singular. Use 'natural scenery' instead of 'natural sceneries.' Suggestion: Choose correct verb form ('love taking' or 'love to take') and fix article/plural: 'I love taking pictures of really beautiful views like natural scenery and mountains.'

× I normally capture it in my phone and also to love to share the pictures on the social media.

✓ I normally capture them on my phone and also love to share the pictures on social media.

Pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'pictures'—use 'them'. Preposition 'in my phone' is unnatural; use 'on my phone'. Unnecessary 'to' before 'love to share' when using parallel structure; 'also love to share' or 'also share' is correct. 'the social media' should be 'social media' without 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'them' for plural objects, 'on my phone', and omit 'the' before 'social media'.

× Definitely I will go with the rural areas as uh, for me, the village area is quite calm and peaceful.

✓ Definitely I would go for rural areas because, for me, village areas are quite calm and peaceful.

Use of 'will go with the rural areas' is awkward. For preferences, 'would go for' or 'prefer' is better. Also mix of singular/plural: 'the village area is' vs general statement—use plural 'village areas are' or 'the village area is' with consistent article. 'Go for' is more idiomatic than 'go with'. Suggestion: Express preference with 'I would go for rural areas' or 'I prefer rural areas.' Ensure number agreement: 'village areas are'.

× I really enjoy and the views over there, like the sunset over there and the night over there is so calm.

✓ I really enjoy the views there, like the sunset and the nighttime, which are so calm.

Sentence has extra conjunction 'and' without completing structure and repeats 'over there' unnecessarily. Subject-verb agreement issue: 'the sunset... and the night... is' should be 'are' for compound subject. 'Nighttime' is more natural than 'the night' in this context. Use a relative clause 'which are so calm' to describe multiple things. Suggestion: Simplify and combine: 'I really enjoy the views there, like the sunset and the nighttime, which are so calm.'

× For me it's quite tricky question because what I think is each and every country has its own beauty.

✓ For me it's quite a tricky question because I think each country has its own beauty.

Missing article 'a' in 'quite a tricky question'. Awkward clause 'what I think is'—more natural: 'I think'. 'Each and every country' is wordy; 'each country' suffices. Maintain natural word order. Suggestion: Use 'quite a tricky question' and 'I think each country has its own beauty.'

× So yeah, it depends on the view or the scenery or the nature, wherever it's find interesting.

✓ So yeah, it depends on the view, the scenery, or the nature—wherever I find it interesting.

Incorrect pronoun and verb form: 'it's find interesting' mixes subject 'it' with verb 'find'. Should be 'I find it interesting' or 'wherever I find it interesting'. Also 'the nature' is unnecessary; 'nature' without article is better. Suggestion: Use 'wherever I find it interesting' and remove 'the' before 'nature' or rephrase as 'natural attractions'.