Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并减少重复，注意句子完整和语法。可以先给出一句主题句，然后用一到两句具体说明理由或举例，避免频繁使用“uh”。比如说明你喜欢拍摄的风景类型和拍摄时的感受或目的。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because each scene has its own unique features and mood. For example, I like capturing sunsets for their colours and street scenes to show everyday life.

提案: 回答较清晰但语法和连贯性可改进。用一个更自然的比较句并补充具体原因或例子，使用连接词让句子更流畅，例如“because”或“so”。

例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because I find natural landscapes more calming. For instance, I enjoy walking by lakes and forests, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，要注意主谓一致及句子完整。避免数字口语化写法“2nd”，用连贯的理由说明为什么更喜欢本国的风景，并举一两个具体例子来支持观点。

例: Honestly, I prefer views in my own country because I have a strong emotional connection to the landscapes and culture. For example, I love the traditional villages and mountain scenery at home, which I haven't seen elsewhere.

× I think each view will need. Uh. Record by different views and you can see many different things.

✓ I think each view should be recorded from different angles so you can see many different things.

原句句子结构混乱，短句“will need”后缺少宾语或从句，且“Record by different views”用法不自然。建议将意思连成完整句子：使用情态动词“should”表示建议，用被动或不定式短语“be recorded from different angles”更清晰，连接词“so”引出结果。

× OK for me I like rural areas than urban areas because I like nature views better.

✓ OK, for me I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I like natural scenery better.

原句中比较结构不正确，英语中常用“prefer A to B”表示更喜欢A而不是B；此外“nature views”搭配不常用，应为“natural scenery”或“natural views”。建议使用正确的比较结构并修正名词搭配。

× It makes me relax.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed.

原句用法不准确，动词“make”后要加宾语+形容词或使役结构。正确表达是“make me feel relaxed”或“makes me relaxed”。中文建议：使用“make sb. feel + 形容词”来表达让人感到某种状态。

× Frankly speaking, I prefer the views in my country to that in other countries.

✓ Frankly speaking, I prefer the views in my country to those in other countries.

原句中“that”指代复数“views”不正确，应使用复数代词“those”。主谓及代词指代需一致。中文建议：代词要和所指名词在数上一致，复数名词用“those”。

× The first I love my country and 2nd in China there are many views that in other countries.

✓ Firstly, I love my country; secondly, there are many sights in China that you won't find in other countries.

原句结构混乱且不完整，数字序列“first... and 2nd”应使用连接词并列出两个清晰的理由；“many views that in other countries”缺少谓语和比较结构。建议使用序列词（firstly, secondly），并补全从句使句子完整。中文建议：列举理由时用“firstly/secondly”并确保每一项都是完整的句子，比较时要说明对比对象。