Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: use natural sentence structures and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say you enjoy photographing different perspectives, explain why, and give a brief example of what you focus on (light, subject, composition).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I like capturing unique perspectives. For example, I often shoot from low angles to emphasize foreground objects, and I focus on lighting and composition to create clearer, more interesting images.

提案: Make your answer direct and coherent: state a clear preference (or say you like both) then give specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words (because, however, for example) and avoid hesitations and filler sounds. Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

例: I prefer rural views when I want peaceful, natural scenes because they offer wide-open landscapes and interesting textures. However, I also like urban views for night photography since city lights and architecture create dramatic shots.

提案: Give a clear, concise opinion and support it with specific reasons and an example. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid vague phrases like “going in.” Use linking words (because, for example) to structure your answer and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my hometown because the natural scenery is exceptionally beautiful and familiar to me. For example, local forests and rivers offer peaceful compositions that I know how to photograph well, so I can capture more meaningful images.

× Yes, I very like to take a picture in a different angle.

✓ Yes, I really like to take pictures from different angles.

The original uses incorrect adverb placement and word choice: 'very like' is ungrammatical (use 'really like'), 'a picture' and 'a different angle' mismatch with general preference (use plural 'pictures' and 'angles'). Move adverb before verb and use plural nouns for general statements. Suggestion: Use 'really like' before the verb and use plural nouns when speaking generally (e.g., 'take pictures from different angles').

× When I'm taking a picture, it's a very good to take a shot to focus on something.

✓ When I'm taking a picture, it's very good to focus on one thing in the shot.

The phrase 'it's a very good to take a shot' incorrectly uses the article 'a' before an adjective plus infinitive. Also 'to focus on something' is vague; 'focus on one thing' is clearer. Remove the unnecessary 'a' and place adjectives correctly. Suggestion: Use 'it's very good to + verb' structure and be specific about the object of focus.

× Well, it depending on what purpose you are, are you going to, So when I'm going to the fishing, uh, like it's a very important in a rural area, views and taking a shot.

✓ Well, it depends on your purpose. For example, when I'm going fishing, rural views are very important for taking good shots.

Multiple errors: 'it depending' should be 'it depends' (subject-verb agreement and present tense). 'What purpose you are, are you going to' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'your purpose' or 'what your purpose is.' 'Going to the fishing' should be 'going fishing' (no article). 'It's a very important in a rural area, views and taking a shot' mixes structures and articles incorrectly; rephrase to 'rural views are very important for taking good shots.' Suggestion: Use 'it depends' for conditional preference, omit 'the' with activities like 'going fishing', and ensure subject and verb agree.

× It's obviously also the urban areas and because you are type of, uh, photographers and it's.

✓ Urban areas are also good, depending on the type of photographer you are.

Original has pronoun and structure errors: 'It's obviously also the urban areas' misuses 'it' and article 'the'. 'Because you are type of, uh, photographers and it's' lacks articles and correct noun forms. Rephrase to 'depending on the type of photographer you are.' Suggestion: Use 'depending on the type of photographer you are' to link preference to photographer type.

× I would say that's my hometown because umm, I remember going in.

✓ I would say my hometown, because I remember going there.

'Going in' is incorrect here; use 'going there' or 'visiting it'. Also 'that's my hometown' is awkward in this context; 'I would say my hometown' is more natural. Ensure pronoun refers clearly to the place. Suggestion: Use 'going there' when referring back to a previously mentioned place.

× Nature is way more beautiful than other countries and it has a very beautiful scenes to take a shot in a photographer field.

✓ The nature around my hometown is much more beautiful than in other countries, and it has many beautiful scenes for photography.

Errors: 'Nature is way more beautiful than other countries' incorrectly compares 'nature' with 'countries' and omits articles/prepositions. Use 'than in other countries' or compare 'my country's nature' to 'other countries'. 'It has a very beautiful scenes' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'scenes' and uses 'in a photographer field' which is unnatural; use 'for photography.' Suggestion: Compare like with like ('the nature... than in other countries'), match articles with singular/plural nouns, and use 'for photography' to describe suitability.