Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dasar, pemilihan kata, dan struktur kalimat. Jawaban Anda saat ini tidak alami dan mengandung banyak kesalahan (mis: "taking picture" → "taking pictures", "sneaky detail" tidak tepat, frasa kacau seperti "I make offers at forget for exam"). Buat satu kalimat topik yang jelas, lalu tambahkan 1–2 kalimat pendukung yang spesifik menggunakan kata penghubung sederhana seperti "and", "so", atau "because". Usahakan tidak lebih dari 4–5 kalimat total dan gunakan kosakata yang sesuai untuk fotografi (mis: capture, details, landscapes, cityscapes).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable details. For example, when I travel I often photograph cityscapes at sunset to record the colours and atmosphere. I also take close-up shots of textures and patterns to remember the small details.

提案: Perbaiki pemilihan kata dan susunan kalimat untuk menyatakan preferensi dengan jelas. Jawaban Anda saat ini sulit dimengerti karena banyak kata salah ketik (mis: "pews", "landscaper", "naturals") dan frasa tidak koheren. Mulai dengan kalimat topik yang langsung ("I prefer views in rural areas") lalu jelaskan alasan spesifik dengan satu atau dua detail pendukung menggunakan kata penghubung seperti "because" atau "so". Hindari menumpuk ide yang tidak terkait dalam satu kalimat.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscapes and natural scenes help me relax. For instance, I enjoy walking through fields and looking at distant hills, which gives me a strong sense of calm compared to busy city streets.

提案: Perjelas perbandingan antara pemandangan domestik dan luar negeri. Jawaban Anda mengandung banyak frasa yang salah dan tidak jelas (mis: "fuse", "register", "magical word", "social curtain"). Mulailah dengan menyatakan preferensi utama, beri alasan konkret (mis: kenangan masa kecil, kemudahan akses), lalu gunakan kata penghubung "however" untuk menyampaikan bahwa Anda juga menghargai pemandangan internasional dan jelaskan alasannya secara spesifik (mis: arsitektur, budaya).

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and are often connected to childhood memories and family trips. However, I also enjoy views in other countries because different architecture and cultural landscapes offer new perspectives and inspiration.

× I enjoy taking picture of different views because it helps me capture unique moments and sneaky detail.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture unique moments and small details.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general activity (singular/plural issue, Article errors). 'It helps' is incorrect because 'taking pictures' is plural or treated as plural activity, so use 'they help'. 'sneaky detail' is unnatural; 'small details' is clearer. Suggestion: use plural nouns to describe repeated actions and ensure pronoun agreement.

× I make offers at forget for exam when I travel.

✓ I often forget things when I travel.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and wrong word choices 'make offers at forget for exam'. This is a sentence structure and word choice error. Correcting to 'I often forget things when I travel' uses proper adverb placement and natural collocation. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'often' before main verb and use correct verbs like 'forget'.

× I photography city skies and contrast landscape for to remember the atmosphere.

✓ I photograph city skies and contrasting landscapes to remember the atmosphere.

'Photography' is a noun; use the verb 'photograph'. 'contrast landscape' should be 'contrasting landscapes' using present participle adjective form. 'for to remember' is ungrammatical; use infinitive 'to remember'. Suggestion: use base verb 'photograph' for actions and '-ing' form as adjective for ongoing qualities.

× I prefer pews in rural areas because the open landscaper and naturals can never help me relax and feel refreshed unlike crowded cities cafes for action saying films 3 and distance give me a sense of calm and stronger competition to nature which.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscapes and nature help me relax and feel refreshed, unlike crowded city cafes; the space and distance give me a sense of calm and a stronger connection to nature.

Many words are incorrect forms: 'pews' should be 'views' (wrong word), 'landscaper' -> 'landscapes' (plural), 'naturals' -> 'nature', 'cities cafes' -> 'city cafes' or 'city cafes' corrected to 'crowded city cafes'. 'can never help me' should be 'help me' (meaning positive). 'stronger competition to nature' is wrong; intended 'connection to nature'. This is mainly pluralization and word choice issues. Suggestion: use correct plural forms for countable nouns and accurate collocations like 'connection to nature'.

× I prefer fuse in my own country register are familiar and emotional magic word to me for exam.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and emotionally significant to me.

'fuse' should be 'views'; 'register are familiar' is garbled—use 'because they are familiar'. 'emotional magic word' is incorrect; 'emotionally significant' conveys intended meaning. This involves singular/plural corrections and word choice. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and choose appropriate adjectives/adverbs.

× I often a social curtain landscape with childhood memories and family trips.

✓ I often associate landscapes with childhood memories and family trips.

Original lacks proper verb: 'I often a social curtain landscape' is ungrammatical. Use verb 'associate' to link landscapes with memories. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb-object structure and correct verbs to express relationships.

× However, I also enjoy views in the other countries for their nightly and cultural differences which surrender my.

✓ However, I also enjoy views in other countries because of their natural scenery and cultural differences, which fascinate me.

'the other countries' -> 'other countries'; 'nightly' is wrong for 'natural' or 'scenic'; 'surrender my' is incorrect, intended 'fascinate me'. This is sentence structure and word choice issue. Suggestion: use 'because of' to state reasons and correct verbs like 'fascinate'.