Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and small grammar mistakes (e.g., say “if I travel a lot in the future” or “when I travel more”). Also limit your answer to about 2–3 sentences to sound more fluent and effective.

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing new places because I like capturing unfamiliar architecture and landscapes, and when I travel more in the future I hope to build a large collection of travel photos.

提案: Provide a clear reason and specific examples, and correct grammar. Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give one or two concrete reasons using linking words (for example, “because” or “so”). Avoid unclear phrases like “it's my wife and my lifestyle” — clarify what you mean.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy busy streets and modern architecture; for example, I like photographing skyscrapers, cafés and street scenes, which suit my lifestyle and interests.

提案: Make your answer direct and coherent. State your preference first, then give one clear reason and a brief example. Avoid vague or confusing remarks (“we lack the views”). Use linking words like “however” to contrast ideas.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of home and local traditions; however, I also enjoy visiting other countries to see different landscapes and cultures, such as coastal towns or historic city centers.

× I like to take pictures in different views, especially new places and I would like to take it more if I will travel a lot in future.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views, especially in new places, and I would like to take more if I travel a lot in the future.

The clause 'if I will travel' uses a future tense in the if-clause, which is incorrect for real conditional sentences in English. Use the present simple in the if-clause to talk about future possibilities (zero/first conditional). Also corrected prepositions: 'pictures of' and 'in new places', and 'take it more' to 'take more' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer more urban areas than rural areas because it's my wife and my lifestyle.

✓ I prefer urban areas to rural areas because that is my and my wife's lifestyle.

The original 'it's my wife and my lifestyle' uses incorrect pronoun and possessive order. Use 'that is my and my wife's lifestyle' or 'my wife's and my lifestyle' to show possession clearly. Also changed comparative 'prefer more urban areas than' to the more natural 'prefer urban areas to rural areas.'

× I like something all the more than rural.

✓ I like urban areas more than rural ones.

The original sentence has awkward word order and unclear reference ('something all the more than rural'). Rephrase to a clear comparative structure: 'I like urban areas more than rural ones.' This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× Of course I prefer my own country views, but unfortunately we have the world now and we should live in other countries and with respect a lot and we lack the views, but of course we prefer more our own country views.

✓ Of course I prefer views in my own country, but nowadays people travel and live in other countries a lot, so we miss some familiar views; however, we still prefer views from our own country.

Multiple tense and word choice problems: 'we have the world now' is unclear and uses incorrect expression; 'should live in other countries' suggests obligation rather than reality; 'with respect a lot' is incorrect phrasing. Revised to present simple and present continuous where appropriate ('people travel and live'), and clarified meaning ('miss some familiar views'). Also adjusted word order and articles for natural English.