Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant and natural, but contains minor grammatical errors and a small redundancy. Improve by correcting grammar (e.g., 'taking of' → 'taking') and slightly tightening the response to one clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Use a linking word to connect reasons.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel. For example, I often photograph breathtaking mountains and vibrant sunsets because they make great memories and I like to share the best shots with friends.

提案: The idea is clear but grammar, word choice and clarity need work. Use present tense ('prefer'), correct subject-verb agreement, remove repetition, and replace unclear words ('flakes') with specific details (e.g., wildlife, flowers). Use one linking word to connect reasons and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the open spaces are surrounded by lush green mountains and the air is much fresher. Also, there is abundant wildlife and colorful wildflowers, which makes rural scenery more peaceful and attractive to me.

提案: Good content and coherent structure, but fix word choice and grammar ('using' → 'my', 'slashed' unclear). Improve precision by replacing imprecise adjectives with accurate descriptors and ensure subject-verb agreement. Keep it to two sentences and use a linking word to explain why.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has dramatic green mountains and beautiful beaches along the coastline. The variety of scenery—from forested slopes to sandy shores—means I can relax in nature or explore new coastal towns, which I really enjoy.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking of different views, especially when I travel.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (verb+-ing) or a noun. The original sentence has 'taking of different views' which is ungrammatical because 'take' needs an object like 'pictures' here. Use 'taking pictures of different views' to provide the correct object and maintain the gerund form.

× I preferred views in rural areas because the open spaces is also surrounded by green lush mountains and the the air is fresh and clean and also there's a lot of flakes and other.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the open spaces are surrounded by lush green mountains, the air is fresh and clean, and there are also a lot of flowers and other plants.

The response should match the present preference question, so use present tense 'prefer' rather than past 'preferred'. Several other issues: subject-verb agreement ('open spaces are' not 'is'), adjective order ('lush green' not 'green lush'), duplicated 'the the' removed, and 'flakes' is likely a wrong word choice—'flowers' or 'foliage' fits better. Also change 'there's a lot of' to 'there are a lot of' to agree with the plural noun 'flowers'.

× I prefer using my own country because it has slashed Green Mountains and beautiful beaches along the coastline.

✓ I prefer my own country because it has lush green mountains and beautiful beaches along the coastline.

The verb 'prefer' here is fine but 'prefer using my own country' is unnatural—use 'prefer my own country' or 'prefer to use'. 'Slashed Green' is incorrect word choice and capitalization; the correct adjective order and form is 'lush green'. Keep capitalization consistent.

× The variety of scenery from forested slopes to sandy shores make it a special place to relax and explore.

✓ The variety of scenery from forested slopes to sandy shores makes it a special place to relax and explore.

The subject 'The variety' is singular, so the verb should be singular 'makes' not 'make'. Ensure subject-verb agreement in present tense.