Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (locations, images, help me get to know the area), and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, because / so) and a specific example of when you took photos.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different places, especially when I first visit them. For example, when I traveled to Lisbon last year, I took photos of the streets and landmarks so I could remember the layout and find my way back later.

提案: Give a direct answer then one clear reason with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid filler repetition and complete your sentence. Be specific about what you like in urban views (architecture, people, convenience).

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and lively atmosphere. For instance, city streets with cafes and tall buildings make me feel at home and help me discover new neighborhoods easily.

提案: Answer directly and use correct comparative grammar (more modern, better organized). Give one or two specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like because or since to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in other countries because cities there often look more organized and modern than where I live. For example, when I visited Singapore I noticed neat streets and modern architecture, which made the scenery more impressive.

× I like taking pictures of different location.

✓ I like taking pictures of different locations.

The noun 'location' refers to countable places and should be plural after 'different' which indicates more than one. Use 'locations' to match plurality. Suggestion: use plural nouns after words like 'different', 'many', 'several'.

× Especially when I'm new to the location.

✓ Especially when I'm new to a location.

The phrase 'the location' implies a specific known place; here the speaker means any location they are new to, so use the indefinite article 'a'. Also keep present tense 'I'm' which is correct. Suggestion: use 'a location' when referring to any one of many places.

× I like taking the images of the area to enable me know the area very well and to give me a good memory in a nearest nearest.

✓ I like taking pictures of the area to help me get to know it well and to give me a good memory of it.

Several issues: 'enable me know' is ungrammatical — use 'help me get to know' or 'enable me to know'; 'the images' is unnatural compared with 'pictures'; 'in a nearest nearest' is incorrect and unclear — likely intended 'as a lasting memory' or 'of it'. The corrected sentence uses 'help me get to know it well' and 'give me a good memory of it' for clarity and correct grammar. Suggestion: use 'help me get to know it' and 'memory of it' for natural phrasing.

× I love, I love views of urban areas because it's it makes me feel at home and help me to know the to see different areas.

✓ I love views of urban areas because they make me feel at home and help me see different places.

Subjects and verbs must agree: 'views' is plural so use 'they make' (third person plural). Remove redundant 'it's it'. Use 'help me see' (not 'help me to know the to see'). Also 'areas' can be replaced with 'places' for naturalness. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid redundancy; use simple infinitive 'help me see'.

× I love yous in another country because it is well arranged, the buildings are well arranged and the structure is well modern than my own country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because they are well arranged; the buildings are well organized and the structures are more modern than in my own country.

Multiple errors: 'I love yous' is incorrect — likely 'I love views' or 'I prefer views'. Use 'other countries' instead of 'another country' to match plural 'views'; pronoun 'they' refers to 'views' or 'places' (plural). 'Well modern' is ungrammatical; use 'more modern than' for comparison. Also compare 'than in my own country' to avoid repeating 'my own country' awkwardly. Suggestion: use 'prefer views in other countries', ensure pronoun referent matches plurality, and use comparative 'more modern than'.