Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Melhore a fluência e a precisão, evitando repetições e sons de preenchimento (como “uh”). Seja mais específico sobre que tipo de vistas gosta de fotografar e siga uma estrutura clara: afirmação direta seguida de 1–2 detalhes concretos. Por exemplo, mencione motivos (luz, cores, atmosfera) e contexto (paisagens, edifícios, pessoas).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like coastal scenes at the beach because of the changing light, and I often take pictures in city centres where historic architecture and lively streets create interesting compositions.

提案: Evite repetição (“modern modern”) e linguagem vaga (“stuff like this”). Dê uma razão clara e específica para a preferência e use um conector para ligar a ideia principal ao detalhe. Mantenha-se dentro de 3–4 frases para ser conciso.

例: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the vibrant atmosphere and modern architecture. For example, city lights and street art make evening photos more dynamic, and there are often concerts and markets that add interesting subjects to capture.

提案: Organize a clearer response: comece por afirmar a sua preferência geral, depois compare com exemplos concretos. Evite frases incompletas e palavras fora de contexto (“I like boats” parece fora de tema). Use vocabulário preciso para descrever o que gostou (paisagens naturais, monumentos, praias) e ligue as ideias com conectores (for example, however).

例: I enjoy views in other countries because I love experiencing different landscapes and cultures. For example, in Switzerland I admired the natural scenery and mountain views, while in countries like Japan I appreciated urban design and traditional gardens. However, I also value my own country’s beaches and historic monuments, which offer familiar and beautiful scenes.

× I like taking pictures of different views, especially, uh, when I go to the beach, uh, when I go to the capital of my country and, uh, when I go to a new coffee.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I go to the beach, when I visit the capital of my country, or when I go to a new cafe.

The original sentence uses 'a new coffee' which is incorrect because 'coffee' as a place should be 'cafe' or 'coffee shop'. Also unnecessary filler words and commas disrupt fluency. Suggestion: use 'visit' for cities and 'cafe' for places, and remove filler 'uh' and extra commas to improve clarity.

× I prefer urban areas because I like the cities, the concerts, and I like the modern modern style. I like more lights, more shoppings and stuff like this.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I like cities, concerts, and modern styles. I prefer brighter lights, more shops, and things like that.

'The cities' and 'the concerts' are unnecessarily definite; plural nouns should often be used without 'the'. 'Modern modern' is repetitive. 'More shoppings' is incorrect because 'shopping' as a noun is uncountable or use 'shops' for countable places. Suggestion: use 'shops' not 'shoppings', avoid repetition, and use 'things like that' instead of 'stuff like this'.

× I like boats because I like very countries like South Korea, Japan, China.

✓ I like boats because I enjoy visiting countries such as South Korea, Japan, and China.

The phrase 'very countries' is incorrect; likely intended 'many' or 'various' or 'foreign' but context shows 'visiting countries'. Also word order and verb choice need adjustment. Suggestion: use 'visiting countries such as' or 'countries like' and place country names in a list.

× I have been in Switzerland and I love it, the views because it's very natural monuments, very beautiful.

✓ I have been to Switzerland and I loved it; the views were very natural and beautiful.

Use 'been to' with countries. Mixing present perfect 'have been' with 'I love it' is acceptable, but description of past visit fits better with past tense 'loved' and 'were'. 'It's very natural monuments' is ungrammatical: 'monuments' is plural and requires agreement. Suggestion: say 'the views were very natural and beautiful' or 'it has very natural monuments'.

× But I like my country too, because the beach, because the monument and the. Everything.

✓ But I like my country too because of the beaches, because of the monuments, and everything else.

Omission of prepositions and articles ('because the beach') is incorrect. 'The. Everything.' is fragmented. Suggestion: use 'because of the beaches' and 'monuments' (plural) and complete the sentence with 'and everything else'.