Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (pictures, not ‘picture of different news’), and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Also correct grammar (e.g., ‘I love taking pictures of mountains and skylines’).

例: Yes — I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, as a videographer I often photograph mountain landscapes and city skylines because the light and composition vary a lot. Additionally, I like photographing people since facial expressions can tell powerful stories.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., ‘however’, ‘because’). Fix prepositions and plural/singular: ‘pictures of skylines’, ‘pictures of the mountains’. Keep sentences concise and avoid vague endings.

例: It depends. I sometimes prefer urban views because city skylines and street scenes offer dynamic subjects and interesting light. However, I also enjoy rural scenes — I photograph mountains and the sea because they are peaceful and offer dramatic natural backdrops.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler phrases like ‘Hello’ or ‘if I have to tell you the truth’. Use correct nouns (Italy, not ‘Italian news’), avoid repetition, and give one clear example with specific details (e.g., Amalfi Coast, historic architecture, statues). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Italy, because of its varied scenery and rich history. For example, the Amalfi Coast combines beautiful sea views, colorful towns and important historical monuments, which I find very photogenic.

× So basically as a videographer I love taking picture of different news.

✓ So basically, as a videographer I love taking pictures of different scenes.

The noun after 'taking' should be in plural when speaking generally ('pictures') and 'taking picture of different news' is unnatural: 'news' is uncountable and not used with 'picture of'. Use 'scenes' or 'views'. Also add a comma after 'So basically'. (Problem type: verb + -ing form and collocation/plural usage.)

× I love taking picture to mountain so beautiful surroundings or skyline skylines and I also love taking picture to people because I think that people can express so many thing from.

✓ I love taking pictures of mountains, beautiful surroundings, and skylines, and I also love taking pictures of people because I think people can express so many things through their expressions.

The correct preposition after 'taking pictures' is 'of', not 'to'. Use plural nouns for general statements ('mountains', 'skylines', 'things'). 'So beautiful surroundings' should be 'beautiful surroundings' and the phrase 'express so many thing from' is incorrect: use 'express so many things through their expressions' or 'through their faces/body language'.

× It depends, sometimes I like taking picture about skyline, urban areas, so people who live in a city and other times I like taking pictures to the mountains or the sea because sea and mountain are a peaceful place that are so.

✓ It depends. Sometimes I like taking pictures of skylines and urban areas, of people who live in a city, and other times I like taking pictures of the mountains or the sea because the sea and mountains are peaceful places.

Use 'taking pictures of', not 'taking picture about' or 'taking pictures to'. Maintain plural or definite forms: 'the sea and mountains' and 'peaceful places' (plural) for general reference. Also break into clearer clauses and add articles where needed ('the sea').

× Hello, if I have to tell you the truth, I prefer Italian news because I think that Italian Italian has the best surrounding ever.

✓ Well, to tell you the truth, I prefer Italian scenery because I think Italy has the best surroundings ever.

'Italian news' is wrong collocation for landscapes; use 'Italian scenery'. Repeating 'Italian' is an error. Use 'Italy' as the noun for the country. 'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings'.

× Like an example is Amalfi.

✓ For example, Amalfi is one.

'Like an example is Amalfi' is awkward. Use 'For example, Amalfi is one' or 'For example, Amalfi is one of them.' Use appropriate introductory phrase 'For example.'

× So the sea, the city and it's beautiful and but also because we have so many important statue.

✓ The sea and the city are beautiful, and also we have so many important statues.

'The sea, the city and it's beautiful' has subject-verb issues and wrong contraction: use 'are beautiful' for plural subjects. 'It's' (it is) is incorrect here. 'Statue' should be plural 'statues' when speaking generally. Remove extra 'but'.

× I love taking picture to people because I think that people can express so many thing from.

✓ I love taking pictures of people because I think that people can express so many things.

Use plural 'pictures' and plural 'things'. Also use correct preposition 'of' and remove trailing 'from' which is unnecessary.