Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct verb forms, and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add a brief specific detail (what scenes you like) and a linking phrase to explain why.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take pictures of coastlines and mountain landscapes because they help me remember trips and capture the atmosphere.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct articles and plural forms, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words (because, so). Replace vague phrases with concrete descriptions.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the scenery is more peaceful and the air is fresher. For example, I enjoy quiet fields and tree-lined roads where I can relax and take clearer photos.

提案: Be concise and fluent: give a direct answer, avoid fillers, and explain with a specific reason or example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'new' not 'news'; 'countryside' or 'places') and include a linking word (because, so, for example).

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and cultures. For instance, visiting rural villages abroad lets me photograph unfamiliar architecture and try local foods, which makes travel more exciting.

× I think everybody like taking pictures of different views.

✓ I think everybody likes taking pictures of different views.

The subject 'everybody' is singular and requires a singular verb form. Use 'likes' (third person singular) instead of 'like'. Suggestion: Pair indefinite pronouns like 'everybody' with singular verbs (e.g., 'everybody likes').

× So do I uh, when I go out uh, for the first one, I like to uh, taking pictures of different uh, sceneries, uh and uh, I like to keep them and uh, to remember the trip.

✓ So do I. When I go out, for the first time, I like to take pictures of different sceneries, and I like to keep them to remember the trip.

Multiple issues: 'taking' after 'like to' is incorrect because 'like to' should be followed by the base verb form (verb infinitive without 'to' repeated). 'For the first one' is unclear; 'for the first time' fits the context. 'Sceneries' is acceptable but 'scenery' is often uncountable; however plural 'sceneries' can be used. Also punctuation and filler words were cleaned. Suggestion: Use 'like to' + base verb (e.g., 'like to take') and clear time expressions ('first time').

× Actually I prefer a views in a rural areas areas because views in rural areas are scenic, the areas fresher as a clean vessel and the scenic scenery. I soak up.

✓ Actually I prefer views in rural areas because the views in rural areas are scenic; the areas are fresher and cleaner, and I can soak them up.

Several article and noun form errors: 'a views' mixes singular article with plural noun — remove 'a'. 'a rural areas' wrong article and number — use 'rural areas' without 'a'. 'the areas fresher as a clean vessel' is ungrammatical and unclear; corrected to 'the areas are fresher and cleaner'. 'soak up' is a phrasal verb that needs an object; use 'soak them up' referring to the views. Suggestion: Match articles to noun number (no 'a' with plural), use 'are' for adjective predicates, and ensure phrasal verbs have correct objects.

× I prefer views in, uh, other countries. Uh, I think that, uh, the views in other countries are, uh, news and, uh, are new and I uh, like to, uh, adventure in a new, uh, countryside, uh, for. Seeing new team.

✓ I prefer views in other countries. I think that the views in other countries are new, and I like to explore a new countryside to see new things.

Multiple issues: 'news' is incorrect word choice; 'new' is correct. 'Adventure' is a noun; the intended verb is 'explore' or 'have adventures in'. 'a new countryside' is acceptable but 'countryside' often used without article when general; here 'a new countryside' works. 'for. Seeing new team' is ungrammatical — likely 'to see new things'. Suggestion: Use correct part of speech (verb vs noun), choose appropriate vocabulary ('explore' instead of 'adventure' as a verb), and ensure phrases like 'to see new things' are complete and grammatical.