Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting details. Use linking words and specific examples. For instance, say you enjoy taking photos because they preserve memories and help you recall places, then give one brief example of a favorite photo and what it reminds you of.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me preserve special memories. For example, a picture I took at a seaside town reminds me of the smell of the sea and the time I spent with my family. Therefore, I often look at photos to relive those moments.

提案: Answer directly with a clear preference and give specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammatical errors and avoid vague phrases. State whether you prefer rural or urban views and explain with 1–2 supporting reasons and an example.

例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and less crowded. For example, after spending many days in the city for work, I like visiting the countryside to enjoy fresh air and green landscapes, which helps me relax.

提案: Make a clear direct answer and give specific reasons. Use correct grammar and linking words to connect ideas. State whether you prefer domestic or foreign views and explain why with a concrete example of a new place that inspired you.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new cultures and landscapes. For instance, seeing the architecture in Japan inspired me to learn more about its history and plan a future trip there.

× Yes I like this picture in different feel because we can give the memory in my mind by play the photo.

✓ Yes, I like pictures with different moods because they help me keep memories in my mind when I look at the photos.

Pronoun use and noun form are incorrect and unclear: 'this picture in different feel' should be plural 'pictures with different moods'; 'we can give the memory in my mind by play the photo' mixes pronouns and verbs incorrectly. Use 'they help me keep memories in my mind when I look at the photos' to clearly indicate who benefits and the action. Use consistent subject pronoun 'I' and correct verb forms 'help' and 'look at'. Suggestion: Use clear subject pronouns and match nouns (singular/plural) to the intended meaning.

× So I think when you pick up one picture that we have used to go so the memory view come to our mind again.

✓ So I think when you pick up a picture we used to take, the memory of that view comes back to our minds.

Present participle/past participle confusion and word order: 'have used to go' is incorrect. Use 'we used to take' to indicate past action of taking photos. 'the memory view come to our mind again' needs subject-verb agreement and clearer noun phrase: 'the memory of that view comes back to our minds.' Suggestion: Use simple past 'used to take' for past habitual actions and ensure subject-verb agreement ('comes').

× It depends, if I come to the city from much more town more than three times a week or every day.

✓ It depends: if I come to the city from a much smaller town more than three times a week or every day,

Article and adjective order errors: 'much more town' is incorrect. Use 'a much smaller town' or 'a much larger town' depending on meaning; adding the article 'a' is necessary. Also punctuation: use a clause separated by a comma. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular countable nouns and place comparative adjectives before the noun ('much smaller town').

× I would prefer rural area rather than a city area or anything.

✓ I would prefer a rural area rather than a city area or something similar.

Preposition and article use: 'prefer rural area' needs an article 'a rural area'. 'or anything' is informal and unclear; 'or something similar' is more natural. Also 'rather than' is correct but requires parallel noun phrases. Suggestion: Use articles with singular countable nouns and replace vague phrases like 'anything' with clearer alternatives.

× Sometimes it quite bored to stay one place or stay alive.

✓ Sometimes it is quite boring to stay in one place or to live there.

Incorrect adjective/adverb and verb choice: 'it quite bored' should be 'it is quite boring' to describe a situation. 'stay one place' needs preposition 'in one place'; 'stay alive' is incorrect contextually — use 'live there' or 'stay there'. Suggestion: Use 'boring' to describe things, and include correct prepositions and verbs for living somewhere.

× I'm basically referral review from other countries which I never have seen before because I like something new that to inspire myself to go another country rather than.

✓ I'm basically referring to views from other countries that I have never seen before because I like new things that inspire me to visit other countries.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'referral review' is incorrect; 'referring to' is appropriate. 'which I never have seen before' should be 'that I have never seen before' and 'something new that to inspire myself to go another country rather than' is ungrammatical. Use 'new things that inspire me to visit other countries.' Suggestion: Use correct verb phrases ('referring to'), relative pronoun 'that' for defining clauses, and 'inspire me to visit' for intention.