Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and use a clear topic sentence. Correct grammar (especially verb forms and articles), avoid repetition, and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words for clarity (e.g., because, for example). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember places I visit. For example, when I visited Chiang Mai I took landscape photos of the mountains and temples to remind me of the trip.

提案: State your preference clearly in one sentence, then give a specific contrasting detail using linking words (e.g., however, while, because). Avoid hesitations and repetition, and use correct grammar for nouns and verbs.

例: I like both urban and rural views because they offer different kinds of beauty. For example, urban views have tall buildings and busy streets, while rural views offer quiet fields and natural scenery.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and then give specific examples with correct place names and grammar. Use linking phrases (for example, for instance) and avoid vague statements. Keep sentences short and accurate.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Thailand has a lot of variety. For example, in the south there are beautiful beaches, while in the center Bangkok offers urban skylines and cultural landmarks.

× 'Actually I like to take a picture with different views because it's it's a make me more memora memorize from different place different, something like that.'

✓ 'Actually, I like to take pictures of different views because it helps me remember different places.'

'The original sentence has fragmented and redundant parts (repetition "it's it's", mixed phrases "a make me more memora memorize"). This is a sentence structure error. Correction reorganizes the sentence into a clear subject-verb-object structure: "I like to take pictures of different views" and a clear reason clause "because it helps me remember different places." Suggestion: remove repetitions, choose correct noun form (pictures), and use a concise verb phrase (helps me remember).'

× 'Well, I think I like both of them because they are have a different view in the in in the middle of city we have a tall building at the sun. The like is very good.'

✓ 'Well, I think I like both because they have different views. In the middle of the city we have tall buildings and good sunlight.'

'The original contains plural/singular mismatches and extra words ("they are have", "a different view", "a tall building at the sun"). This is a singular/plural issue and sentence structure problems. Correction ensures plural agreement: "they have different views" and "tall buildings". Also removes repeated words and clarifies meaning about sunlight. Suggestion: match nouns and verbs in number and simplify phrases.'

× 'I prefer viewed in my county because my county is Thailand.'

✓ 'I prefer views in my country because my country is Thailand.'

'"Viewed" is the wrong form and the sentence is ungrammatical; this is a sentence structure error. Use the noun "views" after "prefer" to indicate preference, and correct spelling of "country." Suggestion: use "prefer views in" or "prefer to view" depending on intended meaning.'

× 'We have every view in one.'

✓ 'We have every kind of view in one country.'

'The phrase "in one" is unclear and missing an article and noun; this is an article/phrase error. Adding "country" and "kind of" clarifies the meaning. Suggestion: include the noun and appropriate modifiers to make the idea clear.'

× 'You have, for example, in the southern we have a we did. We have a beautiful beach.'

✓ 'For example, in the south we have beautiful beaches.'

'Original is disfluent and contains unclear fragments ("we did"). This is a sentence structure issue. Simplify to "in the south we have beautiful beaches" and make nouns plural if general. Suggestion: remove filler words and use region name "south" with plural noun if describing many beaches.'

× 'In the middle we have a Bangkok.'

✓ 'In the central region we have Bangkok.'

'Using the article "a" before a proper noun (Bangkok) is incorrect; this is a pronoun/article use problem. Also "in the middle" is vague; "central region" is clearer. Suggestion: do not use "a" before city names and use clear locational phrases.'