Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Avoid fillers like "umm" and correct tense/word choice (e.g., "it reminds me of good memories"; "it's one of my habits"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I always take photos when I travel because looking back at my phone album reminds me of special memories, such as the sunset I saw at the coast last summer.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then give a specific supporting detail using linking words. Remove repeated filler words and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "modern architecture," "skyscrapers"). Mention one clear example and when you saw it. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture. For example, yesterday I saw a new glass office tower in my city that had a striking reflective facade, which made the skyline look very modern.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar and phrasing. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a specific example of a memorable foreign view. Avoid vague phrases like "all this is amazing" and correct tense (e.g., "I've lived in South Korea for nearly 25 years"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I have lived in South Korea for nearly 25 years and am familiar with local scenery. For instance, on a recent trip to Iceland I was amazed by the black sand beaches and dramatic cliffs, which were completely different from anything I've seen at home.

× Yes I enjoy photographing different views.

✓ Yes, I enjoy photographing different views.

Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken punctuation; grammatically the sentence is correct otherwise. Suggestion: include a comma after introductory 'Yes' to improve clarity.

× Umm whenever I go somewhere I always take photos because I usually go through my album on my phone so it remind the all the good memories though that's my one of habit.

✓ Whenever I go somewhere, I always take photos because I usually go through the albums on my phone, so they remind me of all the good memories; it's one of my habits.

Multiple issues: 'album' should be plural 'albums' when speaking generally; subject-verb agreement: 'so it remind' should be 'so they remind' because 'photos' is plural; incorrect pronoun 'the all' should be 'all the' or 'of all the'; awkward phrase 'that's my one of habit' should be 'it's one of my habits'. These corrections address sentence structure, pluralization, pronoun use, and subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: break into clauses with commas and use plural forms and correct pronouns.

× I love both the views actually.

✓ I love both types of views, actually.

'Both the views' is awkward; use 'both types of views' or 'both urban and rural views'. This fixes article/use of 'the' and improves clarity. Suggestion: specify the two categories or use 'both types of views'.

× I live in an urban area, but still I like the urban views because like for example the new architecture which is like a glass building which I saw it yesterday, it's beautiful.

✓ I live in an urban area, but I still like urban views. For example, new architecture, such as a glass building I saw yesterday, is beautiful.

Problems: redundancy ('like' repeated), unnecessary 'the' before 'new architecture', incorrect clause 'which I saw it yesterday' should be 'I saw yesterday' (remove 'it' and use correct relative clause), and comma/phrase placement. Also 'it's beautiful' should agree with singular 'building' or be rephrased. Corrections address verb phrase and relative clause structure. Suggestion: remove filler words, place commas correctly, and use 'I saw yesterday'.

× I prefer the views in other countries because I lived in South Korea for like nearly 25 years old so I'm already pretty much know what it is.

✓ I prefer the views in other countries because I lived in South Korea for nearly 25 years, so I already pretty much know what it's like.

Errors: 'for like nearly 25 years old' mixes age expression with duration; use 'for nearly 25 years'. 'I'm already pretty much know' is ungrammatical—should be 'I already pretty much know' or 'I already know'. 'what it is' is better as 'what it's like'. These fixes address past tense/duration expression and verb usage. Suggestion: use 'for nearly 25 years' and 'I already know what it's like'.

× But whenever I go to holiday in different countries I feel like all this is amazing.

✓ But whenever I go on holiday in different countries, I feel like everything is amazing.

Use 'go on holiday' not 'go to holiday'; 'all this' is awkward in this context—use 'everything' or 'all of this' with correct placement. Add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use 'go on holiday' and 'everything is amazing'.

× I never seen this view.

✓ I have never seen this view.

Missing auxiliary 'have' for present perfect tense; 'I never seen' is incorrect—use 'I have never seen' to express experience up to now. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences: 'I have never seen ...'.