Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar and word choice; make answers natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundant phrasing (e.g., “all the sceneries which at the same time you can record your life”).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes because they help me capture memorable moments. For example, when I visit a park I like to take wide shots of the skyline and close-ups of interesting plants to remember the day.

提案: Provide a direct stance then support it with a clear reason and specific examples. Fix repetition and awkward phrasing; use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas.

例: I appreciate both, but I prefer urban views for their vibrant architecture and lively streets. However, I also enjoy rural views because the peaceful scenery and open fields help me relax.

提案: Avoid filler words and vague answers. Give a direct answer and explain with a specific condition or example. Use linking phrases such as 'it depends' followed by 'because' to make your reasoning clear.

例: It depends on the place because some foreign locations offer unique cultures and landscapes, while my own country has familiar spots I love. For instance, I enjoy overseas mountain ranges for their novelty, but I often return to a seaside town at home because it feels comforting and easy to reach.

× Yes I do. I like to taking pictures of all the sceneries which at the same time you can record your life.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of all the scenery, which at the same time allows you to record your life.

The verb pattern 'like to taking' is incorrect: after 'like' use either 'like to do' or 'like doing'. Here 'like taking' is natural. 'Sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun referring to landscape(s). The relative clause 'which at the same time you can record your life' is awkward and ungrammatical; revised to 'which at the same time allows you to record your life' to supply a subject and correct verb form. Also added commas for clarity.

× Personally I would say both are fine if the views if the view are beautiful then it would be good.

✓ Personally, I would say both are fine. If the views are beautiful, then it would be good.

The original has repetition and subject-verb agreement problems. 'If the views if the view are' is incorrect and redundant. Use a single clause: 'If the views are beautiful' where plural subject 'views' matches plural verb 'are'. Also split into two sentences for clarity and add comma after the conditional clause.

× I would say it depends. Like umm I travel a lot and both are fine.

✓ I would say it depends. I travel a lot, so both are fine.

This sentence is mostly acceptable but can be improved for fluency and grammar: 'Like umm' is filler and should be removed in formal speech. Adding a connector 'so' makes the relationship between clauses clear. Present simple 'I travel' is appropriate for habitual action.