Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변은 자연스럽고 의도는 분명하지만 말더듬(음성적 망설임)과 불필요한 단어(ums, likes)가 포함되어 있어 흐름이 다소 방해됩니다. 또한 한 문장으로만 답했고 구체적 세부정보(어떤 풍경을 좋아하는지, 사진을 찍을 때 사용하는 방법 등)가 부족합니다. 개선을 위해 망설임을 줄이고 핵심 문장을 명확히 한 뒤, 연결어로 간단한 이유나 예시를 추가하세요. 예: "Yes, I enjoy photographing landscapes because I want to preserve memories. For example, I often take wide shots of sunsets to capture the colors."

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing landscapes because I like to preserve memories. For example, when I see a colorful sunset or a mountain view, I take a wide shot to capture the whole scene and a close-up of interesting details.

提案: 의미는 전달되지만 문법 오류(중복 표현 'who finds who find'), 어순과 관용 표현이 어색합니다. 반복적으로 같은 내용을 말하면서 길어졌으니 더 간결하고 정확한 구조의 문장으로 고치세요. linking phrase(For example, Because, So) 사용은 좋습니다. 구체적 이유와 짧은 예시를 하나 더 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다. 예: "I prefer rural views because nature helps me relax; for instance, I enjoy walking in forests."

例: I prefer views in rural areas because nature helps me relax and feel peaceful. For example, walking in a quiet forest or looking over rolling hills makes me feel calm and refreshed.

提案: 의견은 분명하지만 문법(주어·동사 일치: 'views in Korea are'), 반복과 말더듬('like, like', 'a like a')로 유창성이 떨어집니다. 또한 문장이 끊기며 예시 설명이 완성되지 않았습니다. 개선하려면 간결하게 이유를 말하고 하나의 완전한 예시로 마무리하세요. 또한 다양한 어휘(contrast, familiar, breathtaking)와 연결어(However, For example)를 사용해 구조를 명확히 하세요. 예: "I prefer views abroad because they're different from what I'm used to; for example, the Himalayas in Nepal were breathtaking."

例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel new and different from what I'm used to. For example, when I visited Nepal, the sight of the Himalayas was absolutely breathtaking and very different from any landscape in Korea.

× Yes I do umm, whenever I see, uh, stunning scenery, I want to take the pictures to like, keep it as a memory.

✓ Yes, I do. Whenever I see stunning scenery, I want to take pictures to keep them as memories.

The sentence had unnecessary 'the' before 'pictures' and used 'to like' which is colloquial filler; 'take pictures' is more natural and 'keep them as memories' correctly uses plural pronoun and noun. Also add commas and periods for clarity and remove fillers. Use plural 'memories' because 'pictures' is plural. Suggestion: remove filler words and ensure pronoun agrees with plural noun. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I think I prefer views in rural areas because I love to see the nature and I'm the one who finds who find the peace and my calmness in the nature.

✓ I think I prefer views in rural areas because I love seeing nature, and I am the one who finds peace and calmness in nature.

Several pronoun and verb errors: 'the nature' is incorrect in this context — use 'nature' without an article. 'I'm the one who finds who find' contains duplication and wrong verb form; correct is 'I am the one who finds'. 'My calmness in the nature' is awkward; use 'peace and calmness in nature'. Also change 'love to see' to 'love seeing' for natural expression. Suggestion: remove extra words and ensure singular subject matches singular verb. Grammar problem type ID:12

× So I prefer the views in rural area.

✓ So I prefer the views in rural areas.

Mismatch between 'rural area' (singular) and 'views' (plural). Use plural 'rural areas' or change to 'a rural area' to match. 'The views in rural areas' is more natural when speaking generally. Suggestion: keep number agreement between nouns. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Definitely another country because the views in Korea is the one that I'm used to and so I want to experience new, like new, great breath breathtaking sceneries outside of Korea.

✓ Definitely another country, because the views in Korea are what I'm used to, so I want to experience new, breathtaking scenery outside of Korea.

Subject-verb agreement: 'the views' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. 'the one that I'm used to' is awkward; 'what I'm used to' is natural. 'Breath breathtaking sceneries' contains repetition and incorrect pluralization; use 'breathtaking scenery' (uncountable) or 'breathtaking scenes'. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs and avoid repeated or filler words. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Like for example, I've been to Nepal and the views of Himalayas or like a like a.

✓ For example, I've been to Nepal and seen the views of the Himalayas.

Sentence is fragmented and contains filler 'like a like a' making it ungrammatical. 'the views of Himalayas' needs the definite article 'the' and 'seen' fits after 'I've been to Nepal and seen'. Remove fillers. Suggestion: complete the clause with a proper verb and remove redundancies. Grammar problem type ID:26