Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct clear response first (e.g., Yes or No), then briefly explain why with specific reasons. Keep sentences grammatical and concise, use linking words like 'because' or 'because of' to connect ideas, and avoid unclear phrases. Limit to up to 5 sentences.

例: No, I don't really enjoy taking landscape photos because I find it hard to capture the exact colors I remember. For example, sunsets often look dull in photos compared with how they looked in person. Because of that, I prefer to enjoy views without photographing them.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and link them logically with words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid fragmented sentences and incorrect pronouns. Keep it within 3–4 coherent sentences.

例: I prefer rural areas because the open landscapes and greenery help me relax. For example, walking in the countryside calms me more than noisy city streets. Also, fresh air and quiet make it easier to unwind after a busy week.

提案: Answer directly (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries' or 'my own country'), then explain with specific reasons and examples. Use clear linking words like 'because' and 'however' correctly. Avoid unclear phrasing and ensure verbs and nouns match. Keep to 2–4 well-formed sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural contrasts that I don't see at home. For example, visiting coastal towns abroad exposed me to new architectural styles and flavors that made the scenery more interesting. However, I also appreciate familiar places at home for sentimental reasons.

× Never enjoyed taking pictures of different view photography now and I don't like such a slight color and.

✓ I never enjoyed taking pictures of different views, and now I don't like photography with such faint colors.

The student mixes past and present without correct auxiliaries and uses incorrect noun forms. 'Never enjoyed' needs a subject 'I' and should be 'I never enjoyed' or better 'I have never enjoyed' depending on context; here past simple is fine. 'Different view' should be plural 'different views'. 'Different view photography' is awkward — reorder to 'taking pictures of different views' and 'photography' is redundant. 'Such a slight color' is ungrammatical; use 'such faint colors' to describe muted colors. Use a conjunction 'and' to connect clauses properly. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb structure and correct plural nouns; choose appropriate adjectives ('faint' rather than 'slight').

× Or rural areas, I prefer you're the rural area because what you open landscape and greenery.

✓ I prefer rural areas because of the open landscapes and greenery.

The sentence contains wrong pronouns and fragments: 'you're the rural area' is incorrect; likely intended 'the rural area' or 'rural areas'. 'What you open landscape' is ungrammatical; it should be 'the open landscape' or plural 'open landscapes'. Remove 'Or' at the start which seems a leftover. Combine into a single coherent sentence: subject 'I', verb 'prefer', object 'rural areas', and a reason introduced by 'because'. Suggestion: Use correct pronouns and determiners ('the' or none) and keep noun phrases consistent (landscapes/greenery).

× Help me relax and he'll call you not a little later.

✓ They help me relax and calm me down.

This fragment mixes pronouns and verbs incorrectly. 'Help me relax' is fine, but 'he'll call you not a little later' is unrelated and nonsensical in context. Likely intended meaning is that rural scenery helps the speaker relax and calm down. Replace the erroneous clause with 'and calm me down' to keep meaning cohesive. Suggestion: Keep sentences focused and remove unrelated clauses; ensure pronouns refer to the intended subject.

× In other countries, I provoke you and my own country because they are familiar and often avoid personal memories such as family from the nearby mountains or beaches.

✓ I prefer my own country because its landscapes are familiar and often evoke personal memories, such as family trips to nearby mountains or beaches.

The original uses 'I provoke you' which is incorrect — likely meant 'I prefer'. Tense and subject agreement are wrong: 'they are familiar' should refer to 'my own country's landscapes' or 'its landscapes'. 'Avoid personal memories' is opposite meaning; should be 'evoke' (bring back) memories. Recast sentence to match present simple preference: 'I prefer my own country because its landscapes are familiar and often evoke personal memories.' Suggestion: Use correct verbs to express preference ('prefer') and accurate verbs for memory association ('evoke'), and ensure pronouns agree with their nouns.

× However, it does really add more places. No vocal and cultural contrast.

✓ However, visiting other countries really adds more variety and provides strong cultural contrasts.

The fragments are unclear: 'it does really add more places' is awkward; intended meaning is that traveling to other countries adds variety. 'No vocal and cultural contrast' seems to try to say there is 'vocal' (possibly 'vivid' or 'vocal' is wrong) and cultural contrast; correct to 'provides strong cultural contrasts'. Combine into one sentence expressing the idea that other countries add variety and cultural contrast. Suggestion: Use precise nouns ('variety', 'contrast') and combine fragments into a complete sentence that directly contrasts preferences.