Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce redundancy, correct grammar and use clearer vocabulary. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use correct plural/singular forms and simpler collocations (e.g., "different perspectives", "diverse culture").

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different perspectives because it helps me learn about places and their diverse cultures. For example, when I travel I often photograph street scenes and local animals, like cats, to keep as mementos.

提案: Answer directly then give one clear reason using linking words. Fix contradictory word choices (you said "unlike rural area" but meant "urban areas") and grammar (verb forms, articles). Keep sentences concise and avoid hesitation.

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer natural scenery and much less congestion. Therefore, it is easier to take photos there than in busy urban areas with heavy traffic and crowds.

提案: Start with a clear statement, then explain why with specific details and correct grammar (e.g., "other countries", "architectural styles", "Europe" as uncountable). Use one or two concise supporting points and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer views in other countries because, as an urban planning student, I like to study different architectural styles and urban layouts. For instance, I enjoy photographing historic streets and compact neighborhoods in Europe to learn how they shape public life.

× Well yes, I really enjoy taking a picture of different areas of perspective where I can learn more about their interesting places and diversal culture.

✓ Well yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different areas and perspectives where I can learn more about their interesting places and diverse cultures.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund; 'taking a picture' is singular but context requires plural 'pictures' when speaking generally. 'Areas of perspective' is awkward; 'areas and perspectives' is clearer. 'Diversal' is not a correct adjective; use 'diverse' and 'culture' should be plural when referring to multiple cultures. Suggest using gerund phrases and correct word forms for clarity. Grammar problem types: 8 (Verb + -ing form), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs).

× For example, I love to take a pictures of streets or cats when I travel and I keep it as a memory.

✓ For example, I love to take pictures of streets or cats when I travel and I keep them as memories.

'Take a pictures' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'pictures'; remove 'a'. 'It' refers to plural 'pictures' so use 'them'. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' when referring to multiple photos or instances. Suggest matching articles and noun number and ensuring pronoun agreement. Grammar problem types: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns).

× Well, I prefer rural areas because they provide a lot of natural scenes and they have less congestion unlike rural area where they have a lot of people and traffic which leading to uh having a difficulty to take a pictures in urban areas.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because they provide a lot of natural scenery and have less congestion, unlike urban areas where there are many people and traffic, which leads to difficulty taking pictures.

Pronouns and noun references were inconsistent: 'they have less congestion unlike rural area' should contrast rural with urban areas. Use 'urban areas' not 'rural area'. 'A lot of people' is fine but use 'there are many people' for clarity. 'Which leading to uh having a difficulty' is ungrammatical; use 'which leads to difficulty' and 'taking pictures' (gerund) without extra articles. Also 'natural scenes' is better as 'natural scenery'. Suggestions: clearly state the contrast, use correct verb forms and gerunds, and remove filler words. Grammar problem types: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), 6 (Present tense issue), 8 (Verb + -ing form), 1 (Singular and plural issue).

× So I prefer rural areas.

✓ So I prefer rural areas.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses first person 'I prefer' with the plural object 'rural areas'. Grammar problem type: 2 (Third person singular issue).

× Well, I prefer views in another countries because since I'm an urban planning student, I enjoy observing different architecture styles and urban layout.

✓ Well, I prefer views in other countries because, since I'm an urban planning student, I enjoy observing different architectural styles and urban layouts.

'Another countries' incorrectly combines 'another' (singular) with plural 'countries'; use 'other countries'. 'Architecture styles' should be 'architectural styles' and 'urban layout' should be plural 'urban layouts' to match 'different'. Also add a comma after 'because' or restructure for clarity. Suggest correct determiner use and adjective forms. Grammar problem types: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs).

× So I prefer Europeans or Europe country where they have this historic streets and compact neighborhoods.

✓ So I prefer European countries where there are historic streets and compact neighborhoods.

'Europeans or Europe country' is incorrect: 'Europeans' refers to people, not countries; 'Europe country' is ungrammatical. Use 'European countries'. 'They have this historic streets' has incorrect pronoun and article agreement; use 'there are historic streets'. 'This' should be removed; use plural 'streets'. Also 'compact neighborhoods' is fine. Suggest using correct noun phrases and existential 'there are' for existence. Grammar problem types: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 17 (Incorrect use of the definite article).

× That's why I prefer Europe.

✓ That's why I prefer Europe.

Sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately summarizes the previous statements. No change needed. Grammar problem type: 26 (Sentence structure errors).