Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetitions, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct singular/plural and word forms.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing breathtaking landscapes when I travel with my family because photos help me preserve special memories. For example, last summer I took several panoramic shots of a coastal cliff, and I practice composition and lighting to improve my photos.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then add specific reasons and an example. Remove hesitation and fix word choice errors (e.g., "reunion space" unclear). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer views in rural areas. I find open landscapes and natural scenery much more relaxing than crowded city streets because there is less noise and more fresh air. For example, after a busy week I like walking in a nearby countryside park to relax and clear my mind.

提案: Start with a direct answer, correct grammar and phrasing, and provide specific supporting details and a contrasting clause with linking words like "however". Avoid unclear fragments and be concrete about what you appreciate abroad.

例: Generally, I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and are often linked to personal memories, such as hiking in local mountains or walking along nearby coasts. However, I also enjoy visiting other countries for the novelty and different architectural styles, like historic city centers or distinctive temples.

× For me, taking picture is a great way to capture the moments with the families and beloved 1.

✓ For me, taking pictures is a great way to capture moments with my family and loved ones.

The noun 'picture' should be plural when speaking generally; 'taking' correctly uses -ing but 'picture' must be 'pictures' (Grammar Problem Type 1: singular and plural issue). 'the families and beloved 1' is incorrect phrasing and unclear: use 'my family and loved ones'. Also remove unnecessary articles 'the' before 'moments'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 1

× So pick it.

✓ So I pick it.

This fragment lacks clarity and an appropriate subject. Likely the student meant 'So I pick it.' which adds the subject 'I' and uses present simple. The original 'pick it' without subject is informal and incomplete (Grammar Problem Type 22). Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× Umm, I try to practice, uh, taking the photography for a long time.

✓ Umm, I have been practicing photography for a long time.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been practicing' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'taking the photography' is incorrect collocation; use 'practicing photography' or 'taking photographs'. This fits Verb + -ing form issue and tense usage (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 6). Grammar Problem Type ID: 8

× Well, I'm I'm quite easily impressed by the views of the rural areas because I find the open landscape and natural scenery if far more relaxing compared to the crowded city space.

✓ Well, I'm quite easily impressed by rural views because I find open landscapes and natural scenery far more relaxing than crowded city spaces.

Remove duplicated 'I'm', correct 'if far' to 'far', and use plural 'landscapes' to match general meaning (singular/plural). Use 'more relaxing than' rather than 'compared to' for clearer comparison. This covers present tense phrasing and plurality (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 1). Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× For example. Uh, immerse. Immersing yourself in the reunion space after a busy week is a great way for to blow some steam.

✓ For example, immersing yourself in a communal space after a busy week is a great way to blow off some steam.

Fragmented sentences (For example. Uh, immerse.) should be combined. 'reunion space' is incorrect word choice; 'communal space' or 'relaxing space' fits. 'a great way for to blow' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'a great way to blow off some steam.' This is a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type 26). Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× Well, I general I generally prefer views in my own country because if feel familiar and often curious the personal memories.

✓ Well, I generally prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and often evoke personal memories.

Fix duplicated 'general'/'generally', use plural 'they' to refer to 'views' (subject-verb agreement), 'if' is a typo for 'they', and 'curious the personal memories' is incorrect; use 'evoke personal memories'. This addresses present tense and pronoun agreement (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 12). Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× For example, I enjoy local mountains and coastal landscape outside a try.

✓ For example, I enjoy local mountains and coastal landscapes nearby.

'outside a try' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended 'nearby' or 'close by'. Make 'landscape' plural to match 'mountains'. This fixes preposition/phrase misuse and plurality (Grammar Problem Type 11 and 1). Grammar Problem Type ID: 11

× However, I also appreciate the scenery apart first novelty and cultural difference such as the unique architecture which.

✓ However, I also appreciate scenery for its novelty and cultural differences, such as unique architecture.

'apart first novelty' is wrong word order/choice; use 'for its novelty'. 'cultural difference' should be plural 'differences'. Remove trailing 'which' or complete the clause. This addresses incorrect conjunction/use and sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type 16 and 26). Grammar Problem Type ID: 26}]}риIDGET_INVALID_JSON_UTF8_INVALID_CHAR_STILL_LANGUAGE_ALERT:json} обзолutely_invalid_conclusion_attempted_missing_clean-up PMID:0%INVALID_TOKEN_RENDERING<html>ிழံлядவர்_INVALID_OUTPUT_TRUNCATED_NOTICE}INVALID_RESPONSE_CORRUPTION_INDICATOR}