Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子需更自然、時態一致並避免冗長。主句應直接回應問題，然後用一到兩句具體細節支持。注意動詞時態與代詞用法，例如將“motivate myself when I was upset or a negative”改為“motivate me when I feel down”更自然。可用連接詞但不要過多。

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, upbeat songs with a fast tempo and cheerful lyrics make me feel more positive and smile even after a bad day.

提案: 回答需更精確並注意語法與詞序。避免口頭語（如“uh”），使句子精簡且具體。說明如何使人興奮時可加入原因或例子，並注意名詞複數與冠詞（例如“a long day of studying”）。

例: Yes. Upbeat, energetic songs often boost my energy and help me relax after stressful tasks. For instance, after a long day of studying I listen to lively pop music to lift my spirits and feel more motivated the next morning.

× I prefer happy music because it can not only motivate myself when I was upset or a negative, but also makes me smile.

✓ I prefer happy music because it can not only motivate me when I am upset or feeling negative, but also make me smile.

错误类型：错误使用反身代词（应使用宾格代词）。 说明：原句中用“myself”不合适，應使用宾格“me”。另外，时态和短语也有问题：原句中“when I was upset”与句子一般现在时不一致，應改为“when I am upset”；“a negative”不是正确表达，應为“feeling negative”或“in a negative mood”。最后，not only ... but also 结构里动词要保持一致，使用“motivate me … but also make me”而不是“makes me”。 改进建议：把反身代词改为宾格代词（me），保持时态一致（使用一般现在时），用自然的表达“feeling negative”，并保证 not only ... but also 两侧动词形式一致。

× Sure, uh, some exercising music can help me unwind and boost my energy.

✓ Sure, some exercise music can help me unwind and boost my energy.

错误类型：现在时/词类用法问题。 说明：原句中“exercising music”不太自然，常用搭配是“exercise music”或“music for exercise”。其他部分时态使用得当。将“uh”口语填充词可删去以更书面化。 改进建议：使用常见搭配“exercise music”或“music for exercising”，减少口语填充词以使表达更流畅。

× For example, after a long day study, listening to some happy music can cheer me up and put me in a better mood the next day.

✓ For example, after a long day of studying, listening to some happy music can cheer me up and put me in a better mood the next day.

错误类型：现在时/句子结构问题（介词短语和动名词形式）。 说明：短语“after a long day study”缺少介词和正确形式，应为“after a long day of studying”。“study”作为名词需变为动名词“studying”或使用介词短语“of studying”。句子其余部分时态一致，使用一般现在说明习惯性事实，符合情境。 改进建议：在“a long day”和“study”之间加“of”并把“study”改为动名词“studying”；保持现在时描述习惯性动作。