Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural, but a bit short. Add one or two specific reasons or an example to enrich it, using a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me concentrate. For example, I often listen to upbeat pop songs while exercising or studying, which makes those activities more enjoyable.

提案: The idea is clear but the phrasing is awkward and contains an error ('orbits' is wrong here). Use a clearer construction, correct grammar, and a linking word to add a specific detail or example. Limit your response to up to five sentences.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because the fast tempo and cheerful melodies boost my energy. For instance, upbeat songs get me moving and more motivated when I'm working out or cleaning my room.

× Yes, happy music makes me more excited as I listen music and it's creates a lot of orbits with me.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me more excited when I listen to music and it creates a lot of positive feelings in me.

The original sentence has multiple issues that match the 'Verb + -ing form' category and related grammar types: 1) 'as I listen music' is incorrect because the verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when referring to listening to something; also 'as' can be used but 'when' is more natural here. This involves incorrect use of prepositions (Grammar Problem Type 11) and verb pattern. 2) 'it's creates' incorrectly combines a contracted subject 'it's' (it is) with a verb in simple present 'creates'; the correct form is 'it creates' (subject-verb agreement / unnecessary auxiliary). This matches Third person singular issue/subject-verb agreement (Types 2 and 27). 3) 'a lot of orbits with me' uses the wrong noun and preposition; 'orbits' is not the intended word—use 'positive feelings in me' or 'a strong emotional response in me.' This is an incorrect word choice/phrase and preposition usage (Type 11/13). Suggested correction: 'Yes, happy music makes me more excited when I listen to music and it creates a lot of positive feelings in me.' Suggestions for improvement: always use 'listen to' with an object, avoid combining contractions like 'it's' with a present-tense verb, and choose appropriate nouns for meaning (feelings, emotions) and prepositions ('in me').