Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (use correct verb forms and countable/uncountable nouns), shorten and structure the response with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and provide a specific reason or example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer sad music because its slow, gentle tempo helps me relax. For example, after a long day I listen to acoustic ballads to calm my mind and fall asleep more easily.

提案: Answer directly and use complete sentences. Explain why happy music makes you excited with a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid fragments and unclear phrases; use linking words such as because or for example to connect ideas.

例: Yes, it does because upbeat rhythms and lively melodies lift my mood quickly. For example, when I play pop songs in the morning I feel energized and ready to start the day.

× I'm prefer sad musics because the tones of this kind of music's like slow and relaxing not too loudly so it more enjoying.

✓ I prefer sad music because the tones of this kind of music are slow and relaxing, not too loud, so it is more enjoyable.

Errors: 'I'm prefer' uses incorrect verb form and auxiliary; correct is 'I prefer' (simple present). 'Musics' is incorrect plural; 'music' is an uncountable noun. 'music's like slow' is awkward and uses a contraction incorrectly; use 'are slow and relaxing' to agree with plural 'tones'. 'not too loudly' uses an adverb where an adjective is needed to modify 'sound' implied; use 'not too loud'. 'so it more enjoying' lacks auxiliary and uses wrong form; correct is 'so it is more enjoyable'. Suggestion: Use simple present for preferences, treat 'music' as uncountable, ensure subject-verb agreement (tones are), use adjectives to describe sound (loud), and use 'enjoyable' as adjective with a linking verb (is).

× Yeah, it does. Because happy music is. The kind of healing if you have a child day and you want to make your day is a good again.

✓ Yes, it does, because happy music can be healing. If you have a bad day and you want to make your day better, it helps.

Errors: 'Because happy music is.' is a sentence fragment; complete the idea with a noun or adjective (healing). 'The kind of healing' is awkward; use 'can be healing'. 'if you have a child day' likely intended 'bad day' (word choice error) and word order is incorrect. 'you want to make your day is a good again' is ungrammatical: missing articles, wrong adjective form and word order. Suggestion: Combine clauses into full sentences, use 'can be healing', replace 'child day' with 'bad day', and use comparative/adjective 'better' with proper structure 'make your day better'.