Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. For example, say “I prefer happy music” then add “because…” and give a concrete example (e.g. when exercising or studying) to make the answer more specific. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words like “uh” or repeating words.

例: I prefer happy music because it boosts my mood and energy. For instance, I often listen to upbeat songs when I exercise, which helps me stay motivated and focused. Overall, happy music makes my day more positive.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating the examiner’s question. Use a topic sentence (Yes/No) and support it with a reason and a short example or comparison. Connect ideas with linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “so.” Also correct small grammar issues and keep the response concise.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because of its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics. For example, when I listen to upbeat pop songs before going out with friends, I feel more lively and ready to socialize.

× I I prefer happy music because it is, uh, gives me a good feel.

✓ I prefer happy music because it gives me a good feeling.

This sentence has redundancy and wrong noun form. 'It is, uh, gives' incorrectly combines 'is' and 'gives'; only the verb 'gives' is needed. Also 'a good feel' is unnatural; the correct noun is 'feeling'. Use simple present tense 'gives' to describe a habitual effect. Suggestion: remove the extra 'is' and use 'feeling' instead of 'feel' to sound natural. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Does Happy Music Free make me feel excited? Because it is very nice to hear when I'm happy.

✓ Does happy music make you feel more excited? It is very nice to listen to when I'm happy.

The student repeated the examiner's question incorrectly and used 'Free' mistakenly. Questions about feelings should address the listener; here the examiner asked 'Does happy music make you feel more excited?' The student's reply mistakenly turned it into 'Does... make me', which is incorrect in this context. Also 'very nice to hear' is acceptable but 'nice to listen to' is more natural. Split into a question and a statement: keep the question form if repeating, otherwise answer directly. Maintain simple present tense for general truths. Grammar problem type ID:26