Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and remove filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, change "it's give me" to "it gives me" and "listen it" to "listen to it." Replace fillers like "uh" and combine related ideas to avoid repetition.

例: I prefer happy music because it gives me a positive mood and motivates me. For example, when I study I often listen to upbeat instrumental tracks because they help me concentrate and improve my productivity.

提案: Make the response slightly more developed and coherent by adding a linking phrase and a brief explanation. Use full sentences and specific examples to show when and why happy music affects you. Avoid short disconnected fragments.

例: Usually, yes — happy music does make me more energetic, especially when I'm tired or feeling down. For instance, I often play lively pop songs on rainy days to lift my mood, and I choose upbeat tracks when I exercise because they boost my energy and pace.

× I prefer happy music because it's give me a positive impact and help me to be motivated.

✓ I prefer happy music because it gives me a positive impact and helps me to be motivated.

Subject 'it' is third person singular so verbs must take -s in present simple. 'give' -> 'gives' and 'help' -> 'helps'. Use consistent present simple for habitual facts.

× Also, uh, when I study, I like to listen it because it's help me to focus and uh, improve my performance.

✓ Also, when I study, I like to listen to it because it helps me to focus and improve my performance.

After 'listen' the correct preposition is 'to' (preposition error, but main issue is verb form). 'it's help' combines contraction 'it is' with base verb; intended present simple requires 'it helps'. Replace 'it's' with 'it' + 'helps'. Also add 'to' after 'listen'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× I like to listen it because it's help me to focus and uh, improve my performance.

✓ I like to listen to it because it helps me to focus and improve my performance.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before an object ('listen to music'). The sentence originally omitted 'to', which is ungrammatical. Also correct verb agreement as above.

× Also when I do some sports.

✓ I also listen to it when I do some sports.

The fragment lacks a main verb and is a sentence fragment. To be complete, include the main clause that ties it to previous idea, e.g., 'I also listen to it when I do some sports.' This provides subject and verb and clarifies meaning.

× Does happy music make you feel more excited? Student: Usually yes, especially when I feel tired and sad. I like to listen to it when it rains. Also when I do some sports.

✓ Usually yes, especially when I feel tired or sad. I like to listen to it when it rains and when I do sports.

Use 'or' instead of 'and' for choices of feelings (tired or sad). Combine related time clauses into one fluent sentence: 'when it rains and when I do sports.' 'Do some sports' is colloquial; 'do sports' or 'exercise' is more natural. Ensure present simple consistency.