Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with a linking word. Correct minor grammar ("help help" → "help") and use present simple for general preference.

例: I like both types, but I prefer sad music because it helps me feel calm and reflect on my emotions. For example, when I listen to slow acoustic songs, I can relax and think more clearly.

提案: Fix subject-verb agreement and combine ideas smoothly with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences, and replace vague phrases with specific descriptions of beats or instruments to sound more precise.

例: Yes, happy music makes me feel excited because its strong rhythms and lively tempos make me want to move. For example, upbeat pop with a driving bassline and catchy chorus often makes me start dancing and lifts my mood quickly.

× That's an interesting question because I like both of them, but I prefer the sad music because it will make me feel calm and help help me reflect and process my emotions.

✓ That's an interesting question because I like both of them, but I prefer sad music because it makes me feel calm and helps me reflect and process my emotions.

Errors: repeated word 'help', incorrect use of 'the' with a general noun 'sad music', and tense/person agreement with 'will make' and 'help' when describing habitual or general reactions. Use simple present for general truths: 'makes' and 'helps'. Also drop 'the' before uncountable or general music types: 'sad music'. Remove duplicated 'help'. Suggestion: use simple present to describe typical effects and ensure subject-verb agreement ('music' is singular so 'makes' and 'helps').

× Yes, happy music make me feel more excited because it's strong rhythm and lively tempo make me want to move.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because its strong rhythm and lively tempo make me want to move.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and incorrect possessive pronoun. 'Music' is a singular noun, so use 'makes' not 'make'. Also the sentence used 'it's' (it is) but needs the possessive 'its' to show ownership of rhythm and tempo. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects and use 'its' for possessive form.

× For example, when I listen to energetic pop or dance tracks, I naturally start dancing and my mood becomes more positive and energetic.

✓ For example, when I listen to energetic pop or dance tracks, I naturally start dancing and my mood becomes more positive and energetic.

No grammatical error under specified problem types for this sentence. It is correct as written. I include it for completeness. Suggestion: sentence is fine; maintain parallel structure and simple present tense for habitual actions.