Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的で内容も伝わりますが、いくつか改善点があります。まず文法の誤りと冗長表現を減らし、文を論理的につなげるための接続語を使いましょう。また「helps me about」は不自然なので具体的にどのように助けるのか（気分を明るくする、集中させる等）を述べると良いです。文は3〜4文以内に収め、語彙の幅を少し広げましょう。例: トピック文→理由→具体例の順で。

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood. For example, upbeat songs with a fast tempo make me feel more cheerful and motivated when I study. Therefore I usually choose happy music to avoid feeling gloomy.

提案: 答えは肯定して理由も述べていますが、文が繰り返しや語尾の未完でまとまっていません。重複表現（"really quick, really quickly"）を避け、理由と具体例を短く明確に示しましょう。最後の未完の文は避け、結論で締めるようにしてください。接続語（for example, therefore, because）を使うと論理がはっきりします。

例: Yes, it does. Happy music usually makes me feel more energetic and upbeat because of its fast tempo and lively rhythms. For example, when I listen to cheerful pop songs, I feel more motivated to exercise or work.

× Music can change my mood so easily and music helps me about.

✓ Music can change my mood so easily and music helps me out.

The phrase 'helps me about' is not idiomatic. The correct phrasal verb is 'help someone out' meaning to assist. Use 'helps me out' to convey that music assists in improving mood. Suggestion: Use common phrasal verbs correctly; 'help someone out' is standard.

× Listening to music changes my feeling really quick, really quickly.

✓ Listening to music changes my feelings really quickly.

'Quick' is an adjective; the adverb form 'quickly' must be used to modify the verb 'changes'. Also 'feeling' is countable here and usually pluralized as 'feelings' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use adverb forms to modify verbs and use plural 'feelings' when referring to emotions in general.

× So sad music makes me sad and feel gloomy.

✓ So sad music makes me feel sad and gloomy.

The original mixes verb forms: 'makes me sad and feel' is awkward. Use the causative 'make someone + base verb' for both complements: 'makes me feel sad and gloomy.' Suggestion: After 'make' + object use the base verb 'feel' for both adjectives.

× So when I'm not.

✓ So when I'm not listening to happy music, I feel less energetic.

The sentence 'So when I'm not.' is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object. It should be completed to give clear meaning; here we supply a plausible completion consistent with context: 'when I'm not listening to happy music, I feel less energetic.' Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has a subject and main verb; avoid sentence fragments.