School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence naming the school and its location, then add one specific detail. Avoid repetition and unrelated words.

例: I studied at St. Gilbert College in the Philippines. It is a private tertiary institution well known for its nursing program and high board exam pass rates.

提案: Give a short direct opinion followed by two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / and / also). Avoid filler words and redundant phrasing.

例: Yes, I liked my school because it taught me practical nursing skills I use daily, and my professors helped me develop professional values and respect for patients.

提案: Answer directly and support with specific evidence. Use linking words (because / furthermore) and correct noun-verb agreement. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because it offers strong clinical training and consistently high nursing board exam results. Therefore, I often recommend it to friends and colleagues.

提案: Describe the environment with clear adjectives and one specific example. Use linking words (for example / so) and correct sentence structure; avoid vague or repeated phrases.

例: The campus was peaceful and picturesque, with quiet gardens and study areas. Because of this calm atmosphere, students could concentrate well despite the demands of nursing training.

提案: State your main idea clearly, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Use cohesive devices (for example, because / so / therefore) and correct word choice (interest, motivation, perseverance).

例: Interest in study is essential because it motivates you to keep learning and overcome difficulties. For example, if you are interested in nursing, you are more likely to practise skills regularly and stay committed during long clinical placements.

× 'One of the tertiary school that also are popular among the nursing students is called St. Gilbert College.'

✓ 'One of the tertiary schools that is also popular among nursing students is called St. Gilbert College.'

'The subject "one of the tertiary schools" requires a plural noun "schools" after "one of" and the relative clause must agree with the plural head group; the correct verb is "is" because the subject of the sentence is "one" (singular). Suggestion: use "one of the + plural noun" and match the verb to the singular "one".'},{

× 'It is a private institution that also puppy famous for nursing graduates.'

✓ 'It is a private institution that is also popular for producing nursing graduates.'

'"Puppy" is incorrect here (likely a typo). "Popular" describes the institution; also the phrase "for nursing graduates" is awkward, so use "for producing nursing graduates" or "for its nursing program." Ensure singular/plural nouns are correct.'

× 'I love my school very much because I gained proper knowledge and expertise more of more most importantly the skills that I need to practice in my profession as a registered nurse and also I gained too much respect as well as values from my professor way back then in my college years.'

✓ 'I loved my school very much because I gained proper knowledge, expertise, and most importantly the skills I needed to practice my profession as a registered nurse; I also gained respect and values from my professors during my college years.'

'The sentence mixes present and past tenses. The student speaks about past studies, so past tense is appropriate: "loved," "gained," "needed." Also correct plural "professors," remove redundant words ("more of more most importantly"), and fix word order and punctuation to improve clarity.'

× 'Yes I agree that my previous school is good place to study because they offered high level of skills as well as expertise.'

✓ 'Yes, I agree that my previous school was a good place to study because it offered a high level of skills and expertise.'

'"School" is singular so use "it" not "they." Because speaking about a past institution, past tense "was" and "offered" is consistent. Also include article "a" before "good place" and "a high level." Use parallel nouns without "as well as." '},{

× 'They had also high board rating especially for nursing graduates and I highly recommended it to my other friends as well as colleague that that school is also good.'

✓ 'It also had a high board rating, especially for nursing graduates, and I highly recommended the school to my friends and colleagues.'

'Use singular "it" for the school; "rating" is singular and should be described as "a high board rating." Use plural "colleagues." Remove duplicate words ("that that"). Keep tense consistent (past: "had," "recommended").'},{

× 'I can say that the the place in my previous school is having a serene and pictures environment.'

✓ 'I can say that the campus at my previous school had a serene and picturesque environment.'

'"Pictures" is incorrect; the adjective is "picturesque." "Is having" is awkward here — use simple past "had" to match past context. Also "the the" is a typo and "place" is better as "campus."'},{

× 'It's also had a serenity that also you can able to study very well as well as calm your mind.'

✓ 'It also had a sense of serenity where you could study well and calm your mind.'

'Mixes present continuous "It's" and past "had." Use past "had." "You can able to" is ungrammatical — choose "you could" (past) or "you can" (present). Remove redundant "also." Use natural collocations: "a sense of serenity," "study well."'},{

× 'Even though it's a challenging profession that places a good tool.'

✓ 'Even though it is a challenging profession, it provides good tools (skills) for students.'

'The original is unclear and ungrammatical: "places a good tool" makes no sense. Clarify meaning: if the speaker means the profession equips students, use "provides good tools" or better "provides useful skills." Ensure a main clause after the concessive "Even though."'},{

× 'It is very important to one's perspective as well as your goal in your future career.'

✓ 'It is very important to one's perspective and to your goals in your future career.'

'Mixes pronouns "one's" and "your." Keep pronoun choice consistent; use plural "goals" or singular consistently. Use parallel structure "to one's perspective and to one's goals" or switch both to "your."'},{

× 'You need to have a courage to continue your prospective better path so you overcome even though the challenges of studying.'

✓ 'You need to have the courage to continue on your chosen path so you can overcome the challenges of studying.'

'Use definite article "the courage" not "a courage." "Prospective better path" is incorrect — use "chosen path" or "prospective path." Add modal "can" for ability and remove unnecessary "even though." Ensure idiomatic preposition "continue on."' }]}(GTK)