Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more coherent and slightly longer (2–3 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, add a brief detail about who you rode with, and explain one specific benefit using a linking word (for example, because or so). Avoid repetition and unclear words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my brother, which made our rides more fun, and it helped me stay active and healthy because we cycled to the park almost every weekend.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence answering the question, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use correct verb forms and linking words (for example, because or for example). Be concise and avoid repeated words.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Vietnam because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, I often see elderly people cycling in parks and commuters using bicycles to get to work.

× Yes I have a bike when I was try.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was three.

ID 6: The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was'. Use past simple 'had' for past possession. Also 'try' is a typo for 'three' (a noun for age). Include a comma after 'Yes' and use correct number word. Suggestion: use 'I had' for past events and check number words.

× I have a bike with my brother which helps me.

✓ I had a bike with my brother, who helped me.

ID 26: The original mixes tenses and uses 'which' incorrectly for people. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match previous past context. Use 'who' for people instead of 'which'. Use past 'helped' to agree with past timeframe. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use 'who' for people.

× Improve your health and keep fit.

✓ It helped me improve my health and keep fit.

ID 26: The sentence is a fragment and lacks a subject and tense. To fit the past context, add 'It helped me' and use past tense 'helped'. This makes it a complete sentence and connects the idea to riding the bike. Suggestion: include subject and verb and match tense.

× I think bikes are very popular in Vietnam because I I see some old people from some other people rise away to stay healthy.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in Vietnam because I see many older people riding them to stay healthy.

ID 6: The original has repetition 'I I', awkward phrasing 'some old people from some other people', incorrect verb 'rise away', and unclear object. Use present simple 'see' for habitual observation. Use 'many older people' for quantity and 'riding them' as correct verb phrase. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use clearer quantifiers like 'many', and use the correct verb 'ride' in present tense.