Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the tense and phrasing natural, give a direct topic sentence, and add a brief supporting detail. Use past tense for childhood and one linking word if adding detail.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I used to borrow my neighbor’s bike sometimes to ride to the park, which I enjoyed a lot.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Add a specific reason and one or two brief examples or comparisons using linking words.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. For example, many students use bicycles to commute to school, and city centers are often crowded with cyclists because bikes are cheap and convenient.

× No, I don't have a bike in my childhood.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike in my childhood.

The sentence refers to a past time period 'in my childhood' but uses the present simple 'don't have'. Use the past simple 'didn't have' to match the past time. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when talking about completed past periods (e.g., 'I didn't have', 'I had').

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because all of have the bikes like the young generation likes the bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many people, especially the younger generation, like them.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant ('all of have the bikes', 'likes the bikes'). Problems: missing object after 'all of', incorrect verb form and unnecessary repetition. Correct by using a quantifier 'many people' or 'people' and clear subject 'the younger generation' with verb 'like' and pronoun 'them' for bikes. Suggestion: Simplify and avoid repetition: '...because many people, especially the younger generation, like them.'