Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and a brief supporting detail. To improve, make the structure slightly more concise and correct minor phrasing (e.g., say "ride" instead of "roll") and avoid the extra filler at the end. Keep responses within 3–4 well-formed sentences and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

例: No, I didn't have my own bike as a child. My mother did, and we would ride it together around the neighborhood every weekend, which I really enjoyed because it felt like a small adventure. Those rides helped me bond with her and made me more confident on two wheels.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors, unclear comparisons, and incomplete sentences. To improve: (1) Use correct comparative structure (e.g., "more popular than"). (2) Organize points with linking words (e.g., "Firstly"/"Also"). (3) Provide specific examples or brief statistics to support your claim. Aim for 3–4 complete sentences and avoid filler phrases.

例: Yes, bicycles are more popular than cars in many parts of my country. Firstly, they are affordable, so many families buy them for daily use. Also, bikes are convenient for short trips and congested urban areas, which makes them a practical choice for commuting and running errands.

× Yes, bike are very popular in my country than cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are more popular than cars in my country.

The noun 'bike' should be plural ('bikes') to match 'cars' and the comparative structure requires 'more popular than'. Also word order adjusted for natural English: 'in my country' at the end.

× Why? Because it's very easy to access and you can use bike to go wherever you want.

✓ Because they are very easy to access and you can use a bike to go wherever you want.

Pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to bikes (plural); use 'they'. Also 'bike' needs an article ('a bike') when singular. Alternatively keep plural: 'Because they are very easy to access and you can use them to go wherever you want.'

× Then it was not that expensive to get a bike.

✓ Also, they were not that expensive to get a bike when I was younger.

Tense and reference unclear. If referring to bikes in the past, use plural 'they' and past tense 'were'. I added context 'when I was younger' to match the earlier childhood timeline; if the student means in general, use present tense: 'They are not that expensive.'

× It's like.

✓ (Omit this fragment) or say 'It was fun.'

'It's like.' is a sentence fragment without a clear verb or object and is incomplete. Either remove it or replace with a complete sentence such as 'It was fun.' which completes the thought.